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Maybe They Mourn You Too
Went for a ride today
on the boardwalk by the bay
passed the beach shared with you
brown grasses swaying in golden sand
grey rocks teased by barely-there waves
half moon hanging in blue sky, sun still dancing on the water
Did you know the gulls call your name?
Published 24th Mar 2021
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24th Mar 2021 7:59am
Lovely scene setting and a gt dropping last line, what's not to love. Very much enjoyed R
24th Mar 2021 10:27pm
Thank you, I appreciate you letting me know that this made you feel something. Always the best compliment.
24th Mar 2021 11:52am
Dear PS,
True feeling of loss in this lovely poem. A lament of what once was. Your description of the action and scene are brilliant and abundant in such brevity- fantastic. Great piece. H🌷
True feeling of loss in this lovely poem. A lament of what once was. Your description of the action and scene are brilliant and abundant in such brevity- fantastic. Great piece. H🌷
24th Mar 2021 10:39pm
Thank you so much. I was hoping that I was able to capture both the serenity of the scenery and the feeling of something missing, so I really appreciate your comment.
24th Mar 2021 9:41pm
i think i just felt my chest fall to the floor reading this piece that encapsulates so much loss and ache coming through in a flash
thank you for sharing
this hearty glimpse with us :)
-ethan
thank you for sharing
this hearty glimpse with us :)
-ethan
26th Mar 2021 4:28am
Thank you, ethan, your comments are always so welcome, and I'm honored that you added this to your reading list. Your response makes me feel like I got where I was trying to go.
26th Mar 2021 00:15am
Beautifully bittersweet, you paint the scene with such honestly imbued emotion. It's touching work Marie.
26th Mar 2021 4:32am
Thank you, Daniel. It's always a pleasure to read your comments, and I'm pleased that this piece seems to have stuck the chord I wanted it to.
28th Mar 2021 6:32am
28th Mar 2021 7:41am
The beach in late winter has a beautiful loneliness about it. Thank you for leaving your thoughts.
