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(b)loom

even in our happiest moments
it hung there.
plaguing the air
     following us
while still, somehow,
always beating us there.

uninhibited,
our desire magnified with every shared glance –
however quickly –
turned away like to overlook a sink of dishes

Inexorably growing
and collapsing
all at once.
A Super Nova
(a super no-go)

sometimes I see you in the shadows
cast from the light well behind me
      following me
while still, somehow,
always beating me there.
Written by theyrejustwords
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Author's Note
got some great feedback from a good friend on my last poem and made some changes, would love to hear what you guys think of this one compared to the first draft. controlled poetry isn't my strong suit so I'm trying to get some more practice with it
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