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Razor kisses
Today I will be submissive
Not longing for another share,
I will substitute an elegant throat
Under the razor of your kisses
Have you prepared the handcuffs?
Please do not rush to put them on
Look, I'm of my own free will
Chained to the bed frame
You see, how I'm 'glad' to obey
I will not contradict you ... Here,
with a slight movement of your fingers
You inflict the first wound
On the skin, wet with desire,
The tongue is red-hot
How eagerly, to the pain, to the
trembling, You will
drink my naïve innocent smell
On the heart, crucified by dominance,
You will carve out ancient runes,
And boldly play staccato
On the veins, ringing like strings
Loudly, to the drop, to the crumbs,
With delight in my surrendering to you,
Let, gratefully, on the inhale
Accept your burning flames
Let us fly above the ground,
evaporate,
Die from the greatest fatigue,
And we will be (re)born with dawn
Today
I am yours
'No' residue
Not longing for another share,
I will substitute an elegant throat
Under the razor of your kisses
Have you prepared the handcuffs?
Please do not rush to put them on
Look, I'm of my own free will
Chained to the bed frame
You see, how I'm 'glad' to obey
I will not contradict you ... Here,
with a slight movement of your fingers
You inflict the first wound
On the skin, wet with desire,
The tongue is red-hot
How eagerly, to the pain, to the
trembling, You will
drink my naïve innocent smell
On the heart, crucified by dominance,
You will carve out ancient runes,
And boldly play staccato
On the veins, ringing like strings
Loudly, to the drop, to the crumbs,
With delight in my surrendering to you,
Let, gratefully, on the inhale
Accept your burning flames
Let us fly above the ground,
evaporate,
Die from the greatest fatigue,
And we will be (re)born with dawn
Today
I am yours
'No' residue
Author's Note
I removed my original Author's note because I think it was confusing regarding the multiple meanings this has for me. I removed one of the themes as well; I may write more about that in the future but I will leave it off this one and focus more on the positive meaning.
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Re. Razor kisses
7th Mar 2021 8:06pm
So, a couple of themes floating about beneath the surface. reads fairly a b c in the context of BDSM, very clever interweaves are present which cast the words in different lights. shows courage among other thingies
grand job *hat tip*
grand job *hat tip*
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Re: Re. Razor kisses
7th Mar 2021 8:38pm
Yes, it would have probably been better to leave it on the surface. It is much more pleasant there and I prefer that. So I am more than happy for people to just leave it at that like I probably should have. Anyway, I suppose if looking below the surface then clever interweaves is better than brutal honesty sometimes. Thank you for the hat tip and comment, I really appreciate that a lot.
Re. Razor kisses
7th Mar 2021 8:10pm
between the lines it reads give me your hole sole and i give mine in return with no strings attached just give love we both want open and free
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Re: Re. Razor kisses
7th Mar 2021 8:41pm
That's a really pleasant interpretation. I do like that a lot. Giving the whole soul, open and free is a great thought. No strings attached feels like you can go anywhere and do anything.
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7th Mar 2021 10:00pm
Re. Razor kisses
7th Mar 2021 8:32pm
Brava, Kristina❣️❣️ The first thing that struck me was the duality of "today." When you say "Today I will be submissive" or "Today I am yours 'No' residue." Today could mean that from this day forward to you I am submissive, I am yours. Or you better take advantage of my submissiveness today or that I am yours today because tomorrow that may not be the case. Regardless I gathered a message of taking that risk of living in the present. Although submitting to your lover, I like that you say when, that you freely relinquish that control, today...as exhibited in
"Look, I'm of my own free will
Chained to the bed frame."
You can clearly guess which passage would turn me on most,
"You will
drink my naïve innocent smell"
The other that touched me was this,
'No' residue
That, to me, is a demonstration of how complete you give yourself over to your lover...nothing left to give another.
I thoroughly enjoyed unravelling this mysterious piece...I love the cello tattoos in the pic very sexy, reminded me of a scene from "Mozart in the Jungle." Once again you thrill me with your words Goddess BD🌹
"Look, I'm of my own free will
Chained to the bed frame."
You can clearly guess which passage would turn me on most,
"You will
drink my naïve innocent smell"
The other that touched me was this,
'No' residue
That, to me, is a demonstration of how complete you give yourself over to your lover...nothing left to give another.
I thoroughly enjoyed unravelling this mysterious piece...I love the cello tattoos in the pic very sexy, reminded me of a scene from "Mozart in the Jungle." Once again you thrill me with your words Goddess BD🌹
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Re: Re. Razor kisses
You definitely went for the most positive interpretation which I have always come to expect from you GW. ;) Indeed today could mean all of those things and it also could refer things in the past but I am not going to confuse things by going there. I like the aspect of living in the present or for the future while trying to leave some bad things in the past. Taking that risk of living is very important to truly be fulfilled. It can be really beautiful to relinquish that control to the right person. Having that control taken forcefully by someone is a different thing altogether. Completely giving yourself to another is definitely one of the intended meanings for the no residue. Without all the baggage of the past and our own negative emotions and experiences. I like those tattoos also and I like that you saw some of the mystery. I am really happy I was able to thrill you with words. I don't think I ever saw Mozart in the jungle. I may have to look that up. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts with me.
Re. Razor kisses
7th Mar 2021 9:20pm
You know a person can ask themselves which is getting used or abused Jimi Hendrix or the guitar. Would a piano feel used, even raped if Little Ritchie or Jerry Lee Lewis followed on the keys. Is it possible to truly appreciate freedom having never been chained, or gain a true appreciation for the light having never known the darkness. Knowledge can truly be taught and retain if done through fear and force. It must be done willing to become a virtuoso, instead of someone forced to play after school. To become a master in your own rights meeting or excelling beyond the dreams of your teacher or instrument. Hahaha, We see so much freedom in our chains, Tight work again X
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Those are some interesting questions. I think that could be a very philosophical discussion. Sometimes we do need to be chained to truly appreciate freedom and light could not exist without the darkness. Fear and force are definitely powerful teachers. There is a balance as they can be extremely destructive and even permanently damaging as well. But fear is vital to survival. I think that's a good analogy between the passion needed to become a virtuoso versus simply being forced to play. Freedom can definitely exist in chains which is definitely one of the appeals of BDSM. I am really happy you thought it was tight I_IS_ME. I really appreciate you sharing your thoughts with me as always.
Re. Razor kisses
7th Mar 2021 11:12pm
Re: Re. Razor kisses
7th Mar 2021 11:26pm
A phoenix from the ashes, sometimes those are the ashes of the past burning for a better future. Thank you so much for the comment Francisco.
Re. Razor kisses
7th Mar 2021 11:20pm
I just love this poem, Kristina...and as my fav musical instrument is the cello...lol. We humans are a cruel creature...cruelty upon others and ourselves...and sex can be the most delicious morsel of pain and pleasure...and it is a very fine line that separates the two. Bravo!!!
Cheers...Harry
Cheers...Harry
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Re: Re. Razor kisses
7th Mar 2021 11:37pm
I am really happy you loved it Harry. I bet that's the best looking cello you ever seen. Yes, that's so true; cruelty upon others and ourselves - could not have said that any better in regards to humans. We are definitely on the same wavelength there in regards to sex, pain, and pleasure. It can be a very line indeed or a completely blurred line. Thank you so much for commenting and sharing your thoughts with me.
Re. Razor kisses
8th Mar 2021 00:43am
Let's start with it's an amazing write. Perhaps this hitting a bit close to home maybe where my confusion comes from? I LOVE this and at the same time I feel uneasy. Thank you for sharing all your thoughts through this, sometimes it is a little hard to write about somethings.
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Re: Re. Razor kisses
8th Mar 2021 1:17am
I am really happy you thought it was an amazing write. I certainly did not help with the confusion with my original author's note and conflicting themes. Trying to apply multiple meanings that were in so many ways in stark contrast to each other. Past and present, positive and very bad. I learned that's a bad idea or at least pointing it out is. It is hard to write about some things and to share them - I usually avoid that stuff or keep it very obscure. I suppose that's why I went for a surface meaning that was more positive while some things only I would truly understand.
Re. Razor kisses
8th Mar 2021 2:39am
Sorry Kristi I'm still confused. As I read this I don't feel like this is something that writer wants at all but is agreeing and hoping for a better tomorrow. That's what I got. I feel odd saying I like this but I do.
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Re: Re. Razor kisses
8th Mar 2021 1:32pm
Fair enough I really did confuse things with this one Remy. Basically I wrote in a way where there is a positive message while also embedding a very bad one as well that is deeply embedded where no one can see it anyway. Additionally, one that is secondary to that which most people would also consider negative. And worse I tried to point that out in the Author's note and used conflicting themes. So don't worry, let's just say I did a really spectacular job of confusing things. But if you are going to do something go all the way. ugh! So from one perspective, the easiest which is the BDSM angle of surrendering to someone and that pain and pleasure heightening the experience and overwhelming the senses in a positive way. Also, there is a message of love in regards to surrendering to someone and suffering the pains and pleasure of life together. Looking at 'you' in a figurative sense applying to oneself there is a message of self harm but that is secondary to another message that I will exclude from this explanation. I don't think anyone saw it and that is for the best. So what I am saying in so many words is it's not surprising to like it because on the surface there is a good message. :) Thank you so much for commenting and sharing your thoughts Remy.
Re: Re. Razor kisses
9th Mar 2021 4:31pm
I like it a lot. Great poem, you don't have to explain anything. I do appreciate it. I have a little more clarity.
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Re: Re. Razor kisses
8th Mar 2021 1:29pm
Well if it you sum it up in a word then I love Evocative. :) Thank you so much for reading and commenting Osem and welcome to DUP.
Re. Razor kisses
9th Mar 2021 5:45am
"You will
drink my naïve innocent smell" I found this line to be so titillating and immensely profound, oscillating in the senses for everything it means and more. Your BDSM pieces are strong in every aspect, from visual raw vivid imagery to emotional subjugation with the characters at play.
One dares to ask where the inspiration comes from, but one simply does not intrude on an artists peccadillos to satisfy the curiosity (insert Boromir's meme here).
Great work Kristina. Now I have to pick up the pop corn from off the floor.
drink my naïve innocent smell" I found this line to be so titillating and immensely profound, oscillating in the senses for everything it means and more. Your BDSM pieces are strong in every aspect, from visual raw vivid imagery to emotional subjugation with the characters at play.
One dares to ask where the inspiration comes from, but one simply does not intrude on an artists peccadillos to satisfy the curiosity (insert Boromir's meme here).
Great work Kristina. Now I have to pick up the pop corn from off the floor.
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Re: Re. Razor kisses
I am happy you can truly appreciate the depth of the BDSM writes. Feeling the strong emotion and able to experience the imagery and also feel the emotional subjugation. There is certainly more than meets the eye and it seems that you can see that. There is a difference between doing something for novelty versus doing it because you truly need it. Combine some very difficult things in the past, with feeling intensely, being very sensitive, and OCD and it can be a very bad combination. So it allows you to feel intensely but in a different way where you can truly abandon all the other stuff, get out of your head and direct that intensity into something entirely different. Where it can be kind of a reset switch providing a longer runway. This is a much longer discussion so I hope what I said makes some sense.
One dares to ask, is a good way to put it. Boromir's meme - lol I love that you know Cthulhu and Tolkien; we can be fantasy and horror nerds together. ;) The inspiration, God that would take a lot to explain; the inspiration is a combination of many things tracking back into childhood. My BDSM writes come from a much deeper place and from your comment it looks like you can feel this. Intense feelings of pleasure and pain help to drown out the other stuff. There are some very subtle things (mostly just 3 words) that point to a very veiled meaning in this one also that more or less changes the entire write to something very different and point to some things in the past. Also there is another meaning secondary to that as well. I should have left it as a modern BDSM write like I did my others instead of incorporating multiple meanings but live and learn. I tried to branch out sharing more when I was not ready to do so. So I found myself dancing around in the comments and anxious about the whole thing having confused everything probably mostly for me. :p Now I am glad most people saw it in a positive light.
I always love it when you drop your popcorn. Is that mean? I guess that's mean, I'm sorry. It just sounds so cute. :p Anyway, thank you so much for another wonderful comment and sharing your thoughts.
One dares to ask, is a good way to put it. Boromir's meme - lol I love that you know Cthulhu and Tolkien; we can be fantasy and horror nerds together. ;) The inspiration, God that would take a lot to explain; the inspiration is a combination of many things tracking back into childhood. My BDSM writes come from a much deeper place and from your comment it looks like you can feel this. Intense feelings of pleasure and pain help to drown out the other stuff. There are some very subtle things (mostly just 3 words) that point to a very veiled meaning in this one also that more or less changes the entire write to something very different and point to some things in the past. Also there is another meaning secondary to that as well. I should have left it as a modern BDSM write like I did my others instead of incorporating multiple meanings but live and learn. I tried to branch out sharing more when I was not ready to do so. So I found myself dancing around in the comments and anxious about the whole thing having confused everything probably mostly for me. :p Now I am glad most people saw it in a positive light.
I always love it when you drop your popcorn. Is that mean? I guess that's mean, I'm sorry. It just sounds so cute. :p Anyway, thank you so much for another wonderful comment and sharing your thoughts.
Re. Razor kisses
12th Mar 2021 3:12am
Dear K,
It took me a bit with this write. I’m somewhat dim witted (it’s okay I accepted this long ago😉) as I read and re-read I came to my own conclusion that there was an interesting balance of love and submission with a delicate mix of pain and pleasure. As a card carrying hedonist I get all the pleasure points. I really found the closing two stanza’s very loving. I think when two people care for and about each other anything is fair game. Those are my take aways. I’m certain they were not apart of your thought process when creating this poem, however, I so enjoy your insights and writing because they make me see so many other sides to experience and I’m grateful for that. I get stuck in my own world with a myopic view and rarely get out of it. Great piece. H🌷
It took me a bit with this write. I’m somewhat dim witted (it’s okay I accepted this long ago😉) as I read and re-read I came to my own conclusion that there was an interesting balance of love and submission with a delicate mix of pain and pleasure. As a card carrying hedonist I get all the pleasure points. I really found the closing two stanza’s very loving. I think when two people care for and about each other anything is fair game. Those are my take aways. I’m certain they were not apart of your thought process when creating this poem, however, I so enjoy your insights and writing because they make me see so many other sides to experience and I’m grateful for that. I get stuck in my own world with a myopic view and rarely get out of it. Great piece. H🌷
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Re: Re. Razor kisses
12th Mar 2021 1:23pm
You are definitely not dim witted by any measure and that shows in your comments. Your conclusion is perfect for the main meaning. "balance of love and submission with a delicate mix of pain and pleasure" exactly. Card carrying hedonist, nice! I have my card also. Definitely anything is fair game, I need that variety and to explore deeper always. I think you did an amazing job expressing your take aways. Those were absolutely part of the thought process. Regarding helping to see many other sides, that means the world to me. I am so happy about that. It's really easy to get stuck in our own view and things become mundane and repetitive. Thank you so much for the awesome comment and sharing your thoughts. I
really loved it.
really loved it.
Re. Razor kisses
5th Apr 2021 3:30am
Beautiful submission with artfully crafted imagery that takes me into the heart of your experience and the sensations you put into words that make my pulse beat faster. You are a maestro of the different shades of eroticism. Love what you wrote here and how you focused on the positive of the scene.
John
John
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Re: Re. Razor kisses
5th Apr 2021 3:38pm
I love dragging you into my mind so you can feel the experience and sensations. Or possibly kicking and screaming wanting to get back out. There are parts of my mind that no one would want to visit. I do love showing different shades of eroticism. It's an interesting dynamic and scene for sure and it can take you to much different places, although not for everyone. Really glad you liked this one also. I appreciate your thoughts a lot.
Re. Razor kisses
5th May 2021 10:26pm
Love all the layers in this ... cuts to the quick ... delightful read ... nice flow ... vivid ... specificity ... tantalizing from start to finish ...
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Re: Re. Razor kisses
6th May 2021 12:30pm
Hey LDF! I am really happy you liked it. There are definitely multiple layers, some of which are deliberately very obscure and not easy to understand. The BDSM layer is definitely the most pleasant. :) I really appreciate your feedback a lot. I love your description... x
Re. Razor kisses
21st Sep 2022 9:39pm
Wow, I never commented on this one.
Thanks for the reminder.
Multiple meanings abound but that No Residue line brings it home
BIG RAZOR LIKE
Thanks for the reminder.
Multiple meanings abound but that No Residue line brings it home
BIG RAZOR LIKE
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Re: Re. Razor kisses
21st Sep 2022 9:45pm
Stepping back a ways for sure on this one but yours definitely made me think of it. Yes there are a lot of meanings. I suppose depending on who you are and your experiences will direct which you feel in this. Although they all have meaning to me as usual. A razor is a clean cut... if done right there is no residue so to speak. It has no feelings but you feel it. It cuts to the depth you need at the time. It does not ask questions or doubt, it just cuts- that's all it's for and it does it very well. And when that thin line of blood appears and stings... you just think yes I am still alive.
Re: Re. Razor kisses
21st Sep 2022 9:52pm
Do you remember when we were talking about cutting and you asked me if I could cut you and I said yes …. I think that’s how that went in hypothetical terms …. Exciting it was
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