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Icy Rain
The rain. Vapour, splatter.
The temperature drops.
Icy rain.
Snow will come within the week.
A man stands alone at the bus stop, shivering.
Rain bounces off the pavement, splattering his shoes.
He is already late for work.
The rain is raw and lacking in mercy.
The temperature drops.
Icy rain.
Snow will come within the week.
A man stands alone at the bus stop, shivering.
Rain bounces off the pavement, splattering his shoes.
He is already late for work.
The rain is raw and lacking in mercy.
Published 19th Feb 2021
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20th Feb 2021 00:19am
As nature often is, Lozzamus. The imagery befits the mood perfectly, as has become the expected with your offerings.
20th Feb 2021 10:48pm
20th Feb 2021 2:35am
Dear L,
While I’m the first one to go on about how much I like the rain, I must caveat, not icy rain. That stuff’s just mean. I love envisioning the look and character of this poor man alone at the station. Wishing himself almost anywhere but where he is currently. I so love the journeys you bring us on! H 🌷
While I’m the first one to go on about how much I like the rain, I must caveat, not icy rain. That stuff’s just mean. I love envisioning the look and character of this poor man alone at the station. Wishing himself almost anywhere but where he is currently. I so love the journeys you bring us on! H 🌷
20th Feb 2021 10:53pm
21st Feb 2021 11:47pm
22nd Feb 2021 10:14pm
11th May 2021 1:04am
I really like this poem,...
... but I cannot grasp the words to say why.
By looking thoughtfully for a long time at that man, the icy rain begins to exist?
... but I cannot grasp the words to say why.
By looking thoughtfully for a long time at that man, the icy rain begins to exist?
11th May 2021 11:22pm
Thanks, Mark.
There could be lots of scenarios here. Maybe the man is tired and simply stares at the rain as he waits for the bus to work.
Or perhaps he's in some sort of emotional stupor due to an event in his personal life and simply stares blankly at the rain.
Thanks again for your comment.
There could be lots of scenarios here. Maybe the man is tired and simply stares at the rain as he waits for the bus to work.
Or perhaps he's in some sort of emotional stupor due to an event in his personal life and simply stares blankly at the rain.
Thanks again for your comment.
12th May 2021 00:44am
