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breathstr o k e
Published 10th Feb 2021
| Edited 12th Feb 2021
Author's Note
how he rucks from her bedsheets
the patterns to the corners
the almond morning diorama
in witch, lime
and hazel stitching,
from cortina between the lashes
to paper in each insole,
as she parades her pinafore.
she is quarter notes
as her feet lands.
it was not
what I knew to be true
that got me through
it was what
I was unwilling
to forget.
the patterns to the corners
the almond morning diorama
in witch, lime
and hazel stitching,
from cortina between the lashes
to paper in each insole,
as she parades her pinafore.
she is quarter notes
as her feet lands.
it was not
what I knew to be true
that got me through
it was what
I was unwilling
to forget.
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10th Feb 2021 9:29pm
11th Feb 2021 9:03pm
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11th Feb 2021 9:05pm
10th Feb 2021 10:56pm
Bravooo brother bravo!! I am always stampeded by your amazing works. Brilliantly composed as Howlings would say.
-Charles
-Charles
11th Feb 2021 9:07pm
11th Feb 2021 5:08am
Dear N,
Your lovely poem had my mind visualizing a scene of getting through and past the end of a relationship. Your charming depiction of the one time love interest and then the turn of events and how the coping mechanism kicks in remembering what it was that didn’t work and why it had to end. (I know, I think I may suffer from vivid imagination-ism). Your closing stanza is stellar. I also like how you’ve positioned the letters of your title. Very clever. H🌷
Your lovely poem had my mind visualizing a scene of getting through and past the end of a relationship. Your charming depiction of the one time love interest and then the turn of events and how the coping mechanism kicks in remembering what it was that didn’t work and why it had to end. (I know, I think I may suffer from vivid imagination-ism). Your closing stanza is stellar. I also like how you’ve positioned the letters of your title. Very clever. H🌷
11th Feb 2021 9:08pm
12th Feb 2021 6:03pm
Occasionally you read something where the moment is magnified and slowed, so that a footfall thunders. That's what I experienced here. Your language is gorgeously erudite and emotional presence is impacting.
12th Feb 2021 7:57pm
