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Master and Vase (with Reading)
Once, shining with a gloss on the table,
There was a vase in its grace,
And it shone with its facets in the sun,
Full of beautiful wildflowers
Often succumbing to charm,
They approached and touched it slightly,
And for a long time they were so touched by beauty,
Looking slowly along the edges with a glance
But somehow Once, by an accidental movement,
That vase was dropped from the table ...
It fell, flashing only for a moment,
In the fragments of the wretched, losing itself
And like tears water in a transparent puddle
Mingled with small pieces of crystal,
And like thin lace patterns
On those fragments for the first time, a shadow fell
Flowers crumpled and thrown into the trash,
And the fate of the vase was a foregone conclusion -
Glass collected in a small pile,
Sending them after, pitying them slightly
But, however, they wanted to glue them with something,
They even tried, in an attempt to return
Grace and that former charm,
Wishing to revive the form again
And for a long time those fragments were lying around
In the pantry or something, in darkness and dust,
But then a Master came to those people,
He was a creator, a connoisseur of beauty
Having learned about the vase,
he took the remains to himself
And for a long time contemplated the
wretched appearance,
And in the evening he took
these pieces for melting down in his own oven
And the glass spread like a living liquid,
And the Master knew a lot about this,
and again he filled with life
Wounded broken glass
He patiently and tenderly embodied love
and soul, heart, feelings, thoughts
In a different form, in a different beautiful sense,
Giving another life to that vase
And again the vase shone with light,
Absorbing all the subtlety of craftsmanship,
And again there were flowers again,
Keeping the freshness in it much longer
The Master loved so much,
And he did not want to part with it at all,
And the vase came to life and in gratitude
Gave the light, keeping it's love
That's so easy by choice, not by accident
We can break and destroy someone,
And so easily, almost in one touch,
We can revive someone to life
There was a vase in its grace,
And it shone with its facets in the sun,
Full of beautiful wildflowers
Often succumbing to charm,
They approached and touched it slightly,
And for a long time they were so touched by beauty,
Looking slowly along the edges with a glance
But somehow Once, by an accidental movement,
That vase was dropped from the table ...
It fell, flashing only for a moment,
In the fragments of the wretched, losing itself
And like tears water in a transparent puddle
Mingled with small pieces of crystal,
And like thin lace patterns
On those fragments for the first time, a shadow fell
Flowers crumpled and thrown into the trash,
And the fate of the vase was a foregone conclusion -
Glass collected in a small pile,
Sending them after, pitying them slightly
But, however, they wanted to glue them with something,
They even tried, in an attempt to return
Grace and that former charm,
Wishing to revive the form again
And for a long time those fragments were lying around
In the pantry or something, in darkness and dust,
But then a Master came to those people,
He was a creator, a connoisseur of beauty
Having learned about the vase,
he took the remains to himself
And for a long time contemplated the
wretched appearance,
And in the evening he took
these pieces for melting down in his own oven
And the glass spread like a living liquid,
And the Master knew a lot about this,
and again he filled with life
Wounded broken glass
He patiently and tenderly embodied love
and soul, heart, feelings, thoughts
In a different form, in a different beautiful sense,
Giving another life to that vase
And again the vase shone with light,
Absorbing all the subtlety of craftsmanship,
And again there were flowers again,
Keeping the freshness in it much longer
The Master loved so much,
And he did not want to part with it at all,
And the vase came to life and in gratitude
Gave the light, keeping it's love
That's so easy by choice, not by accident
We can break and destroy someone,
And so easily, almost in one touch,
We can revive someone to life
Published 27th Jan 2021
Author's Note
The reading is pretty long. This one was inspired by some things and someone. I really debated posting it or not, I may not leave it up. I would be interested in anyone's thoughts on whether the music adds to it or should be removed and just leave the light rain sound. (or remove that also). Still new to this and not sure how the volume is for other people and if that sort of thing just distracts.
The video is not a perfect fit but it was the best copyright free one I could find with limited time.
The video is not a perfect fit but it was the best copyright free one I could find with limited time.
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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27th Jan 2021 9:41pm
Just the most wonderful piece all the better by your reading
Loved it, absolutely loved it. Great job
Love and light
Ron xx
Loved it, absolutely loved it. Great job
Love and light
Ron xx
27th Jan 2021 9:49pm
Thank you so much for the really sweet comment and feedback Ron. I don't think I will ever feel comfortable posting these but you help me to think it's okay. And congratulations if you made it all the way to the end. :) 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
27th Jan 2021 9:52pm
I was captivated by the poem and your voice
Beautifully done. Go girl
Love and light
Ron xx
Beautifully done. Go girl
Love and light
Ron xx
27th Jan 2021 9:47pm
don't change anything ... Lovely story brought out by your reading ... Bless and love ... .
27th Jan 2021 9:59pm
Thank you so much for the comment FeN. I really appreciate the feedback a lot. I feel pretty good about don't change a thing. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
27th Jan 2021 9:54pm
This was a very well written poem. An unusual but dynamic subject. Thanks for sharing. Hugs and peace, oral
27th Jan 2021 10:04pm
I think in most things I write there is some hint of the unusual, because I am pretty weird. lol Makes me think of one I wrote but have not posted yet called 'My Diagnosis'. I am very happy you enjoyed it. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
27th Jan 2021 10:18pm
Your recitation is just perfect ... this poem just pulled me in ... swept me along ... loved every line ... every syllable your recited ... excellent work dear poetess ...
27th Jan 2021 10:45pm
I always love getting your thoughts LDF, I know that when it comes to poems I would be hard pressed to find a more expert opinion. :) And I am blown away by your comment and incredible feedback on the poem and the reading. Thank you so much. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
Hello m’dear.
I think the music and the rain sound were just fine. If anything I actually think I’d of had the music just a touch louder. Not too much at all, just a tinyyy little bit.
I think the video element was actually really lovely and fitted the theme of the poem well. Wasn’t distracting at all and gave a great visual.
I think with a poem like this... it needs to not be rushed. I totally understand how nerves get the better of you when recording though. Take a few breaths before you record. Settle into the moment. Breathe into it.
If you like, I do run a friendly audio poetry group here over in the Loudspeaker group. It’s packed full of hints, how to’s and recording tips, just if you wanted any further advice or safe spaces to practice in: https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/groups/loud-speaker-poetry/discussion/
I really enjoy poems that tell stories, and this was one of those pieces entirely. There was a moral thread throughout and that is to be adored. That being said this felt entirely more personal to you. Hence why I shall only say that it was seen and heard rather than comment on the specific content. Sometimes, poems just need to be seen and heard and felt... nothing more.
You did a really great job here and I really look forward to your audio offerings. Thank you for sharing.
-M
I think the music and the rain sound were just fine. If anything I actually think I’d of had the music just a touch louder. Not too much at all, just a tinyyy little bit.
I think the video element was actually really lovely and fitted the theme of the poem well. Wasn’t distracting at all and gave a great visual.
I think with a poem like this... it needs to not be rushed. I totally understand how nerves get the better of you when recording though. Take a few breaths before you record. Settle into the moment. Breathe into it.
If you like, I do run a friendly audio poetry group here over in the Loudspeaker group. It’s packed full of hints, how to’s and recording tips, just if you wanted any further advice or safe spaces to practice in: https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/groups/loud-speaker-poetry/discussion/
I really enjoy poems that tell stories, and this was one of those pieces entirely. There was a moral thread throughout and that is to be adored. That being said this felt entirely more personal to you. Hence why I shall only say that it was seen and heard rather than comment on the specific content. Sometimes, poems just need to be seen and heard and felt... nothing more.
You did a really great job here and I really look forward to your audio offerings. Thank you for sharing.
-M
27th Jan 2021 11:30pm
Thank you so much for taking the time to give me such detailed feedback, Missy. I really appreciate that a lot. I did reduce the music volume very low so perhaps I should raise it a little. I did not really search for perfectly matched music but I think it's okay.
That was the best video I could find quickly and I love the rain so that was nice too. I am glad you thought it worked well.
That is great advice regarding not rushing, breathing, and settling into the moment. Hopefully I did not rush it to much. And thank you for mentioning the loudspeaker group, I may check that out. :)
It was personal and there was definitely moral thread to the story. I understand what you mean regarding being seen and heard.
Thank you for the compliment and knowing you look forward to these really makes them worthwhile for me! I appreciate the encouragement so much. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
That was the best video I could find quickly and I love the rain so that was nice too. I am glad you thought it worked well.
That is great advice regarding not rushing, breathing, and settling into the moment. Hopefully I did not rush it to much. And thank you for mentioning the loudspeaker group, I may check that out. :)
It was personal and there was definitely moral thread to the story. I understand what you mean regarding being seen and heard.
Thank you for the compliment and knowing you look forward to these really makes them worthwhile for me! I appreciate the encouragement so much. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
27th Jan 2021 10:45pm
This is just lovely Kristina
The audio was done well and all that goes with it, the music and video, they fit in with a nice subtle perfection.
Excellent write and read you have shared with us
The audio was done well and all that goes with it, the music and video, they fit in with a nice subtle perfection.
Excellent write and read you have shared with us
27th Jan 2021 11:40pm
I always love hearing from you Wh1skeySwagger, and thank you again for letting me use your art. It is the perfect compliment for some of my writing as you know with more to come. :) Also, thank you so much for giving me your thoughts on the audio. I really appreciate that a lot and I love 'subtle perfection'. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
27th Jan 2021 10:49pm
Magnificent writing and voice compliment
You're writing keeps evolving weekly
Be proud of this effort, one of your best !!
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You're writing keeps evolving weekly
Be proud of this effort, one of your best !!
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27th Jan 2021 11:55pm
You have defeated my ability to have a smartass reply with your beautiful words. I do however feel a build up of smartass that will need to be diffused soon in order to prevent damage and mass destruction. I really appreciate the compliment on the writing and reading more than you know. And I am over the moon that you think it is one of best. Thank you, PS. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
KX your metaphors are always so intriguing. Your narration to this beautiful write adds tremendous depth to your blossoming poem...I interpret this beautiful poem that when adversity strikes, people often feel that at least some part of them such as their relationships – has been smashed like the vase. Some people try to put their lives back together exactly as they were. But like a vase which is held together by glue and sticky tape they remain fractured and vulnerable. In contrast, those who accept the breakage and build themselves anew (Master) become more resilient and open to new ways of living (the vase has changed at the hands of another).... Damn I am drowning in the depths of this incredible write. Personally I prefer that my broken pieces are used to to make something completely new – such as a colorful mosaic and those who broke me can kiss my ''gl-ASS''!...Beautiful Kristina!!!
28th Jan 2021 1:15am
That's because I am intriguing. lol (no, that's all you get, intriguing can be scary). Efflorescent, I am not quite sure how to take that - do I have a salty smartass coating? But I am all sweet on the inside. :p A perfectly worded interpretation; people will often try to rebuild things as they were with the same problems and an even weaker bond. Accepting and learning from the breakage you can become stronger and create a different future rather than just repeating the same mistakes. That is definitely one of the core messages in this. And you are already a colorful mosaic Feet, but they can kiss my gl-ASS too anyway. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and this very meaningful comment. And the compliment... I loved it. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
27th Jan 2021 11:34pm
27th Jan 2021 11:49pm
Thank you so much Tim, you are not just Tim to me. :) I love Miss Metaphor. That sounds kind of sexy. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
We have seen those broken and we've those with time, patience, lots of love, and caring rebuild them. But what is pretty today can get the slightest blemish and tomorrow everyone will turn their back on it. This can tend to damage the vase hairline fractures that can't be seen hidden deep within. It takes skill to slowly and with love's heat up and melt down the original with blemishes and cracks only to help it or recreate it stronger than before. Tight work X
28th Jan 2021 00:10am
You are letting your beautiful romantic side show. Depending on the breaks it definitely can take patience, lots of love, and caring to repair but it can also be very rewarding. You make excellent points throughout, it is so easy to cause damage and then turn your back on what you have done. Additionally, it is easy to see only the broken and fractures in someone. But it is also possible to help someone heal, recognize the beauty, and help them become stronger. Thank you for the very meaningful and lovely comment I_IS_ME. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
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28th Jan 2021 00:26am
Thank you so much for the comment and thoughts, Relic. I really appreciate the feedback so much especially on the reading. Okay, you twisted my arm so I think I will leave it up. :) 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
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The memories of the vase with the beautiful roses someone gave you because the truly care about is romantic. Keep on writing.
28th Jan 2021 3:42pm
Thank you so much for the comment Francisco. I am really glad you saw the romantic angle in this. ;) 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
Leave it up, BD❣❣ It's absolutely beautiful and life affirming. I love themes of rebirth and resurrections and the power of kindness and love that brings about the transformation.
The sound of rain is perfect...I pictured you reading in a garden by a fountain or beside a peaceful waterfall. "He was a creator, a connoisseur of beauty" Where can I apply for that job? Brava BD❣❣🌹
The sound of rain is perfect...I pictured you reading in a garden by a fountain or beside a peaceful waterfall. "He was a creator, a connoisseur of beauty" Where can I apply for that job? Brava BD❣❣🌹
28th Jan 2021 6:16pm
Thank you so much for the wonderful comment, GW. I thought you would really love the themes and message in this one. I really love your interpretation and how you describe things. As usual it shows a big heart, kindness, and a desire to help people. That is a beautiful thought regarding reading beside a peaceful waterfall. :) And that does sound like a good job for you. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
Anonymous
28th Jan 2021 6:01am
I love it all, I listened to the whole thing and I'm so moved. I have a really special place in my heart for flowers and vases even. I have photos of my favorite vase at work in case it got sold lol So the sentiment, subject, and your beautiful reading really just got me right in the feels. It wasn't too fast for me, personally but what Missy said is great advice!
28th Jan 2021 6:29pm
'got me right in the feels', I love that! :) I am delighted you were able to listen to the whole thing and felt moved by it. I would feel terrible if you spent all that time and got nothing from it. lol I also love vases and flowers. What type of vase is it? Thank you so much for the comment Rachael, and I really appreciate your thoughts on the reading so much! xo 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
Was undone by the last 4 lines..
"That's so easy by choice, not by accident
We can break and destroy someone,
And so easily, almost in one touch,
We can revive someone to life..
Like someone mentioned atop the subject is unusual I always love unusual stuffs..
"That's so easy by choice, not by accident
We can break and destroy someone,
And so easily, almost in one touch,
We can revive someone to life..
Like someone mentioned atop the subject is unusual I always love unusual stuffs..
28th Jan 2021 9:08pm
That's me, I am unusual so I am here to bring you some unusual stuff. Thank you so much for the comment Numer90, and I am happy you love unusual stuff; it's the best kind if you ask me. :) 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
29th Jan 2021 4:54am
Dear K,
In my nicest scolding voice I beg you to stop being uncertain about submitting your glorious writes in your own reading voice! You have a lovely speaking voice, you have a shining gift for writing poetry, and you have an adoring fan club. You’ve hit an exacta!
As for the write itself, I loved the paradox of rebuilding something wonderful from something so broken. I never understand why that’s so hard to see, even though I’m guilty of it myself. We’re all broken. I wonder why we can never fully accept that as human and move forward without all the fuss and negative energy we give it? I’ll leave that in your capable hands to figure out😉
Beautiful write. H🌷
In my nicest scolding voice I beg you to stop being uncertain about submitting your glorious writes in your own reading voice! You have a lovely speaking voice, you have a shining gift for writing poetry, and you have an adoring fan club. You’ve hit an exacta!
As for the write itself, I loved the paradox of rebuilding something wonderful from something so broken. I never understand why that’s so hard to see, even though I’m guilty of it myself. We’re all broken. I wonder why we can never fully accept that as human and move forward without all the fuss and negative energy we give it? I’ll leave that in your capable hands to figure out😉
Beautiful write. H🌷
29th Jan 2021 7:33pm
Wow, deer caught in the headlights. I have been told I don't know how to handle compliments well and feel like you are using some sort of therapy to make me better at it. lol Not even sure where to start. Thank you for the amazing compliments on my writing, I still feel it is often unusual and maybe sometimes difficult to understand but you should see the stuff I don't post. lol And your comments on the reading really mean so much to me and even the scolding helped. :p I like how you said 'you've hit an exacta!', hopefully I am understanding your meaning properly. Oooo, an adoring fan club sounds nice but scary too - mostly scary. :p I am really happy you liked the paradox; it's true we are all broken in some way and some people try to do more damage while others can actually help repair it. I will work on that last part. Thank you for the absolutely wonderful comment; I absolutely love it even if I had difficulty responding to it. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
29th Jan 2021 9:20pm
Bravo. It's gorgeously proportionate, cadence to your rendering, excellent ambience to the music, subtle depth of nuance to the metaphor, terrific evocative storytelling. 💖🎶🙏
30th Jan 2021 00:23am
I always look forward to your comments on these to know how it comes across. :) I really appreciate it so much. xoxo And this one was really long in comparison to most so I am definitely happy with that feedback because you make it sound it good to me; especially 'gorgeously proportionate' and 'terrific evocative storytelling'. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
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7th Feb 2021 4:49pm
You made my morning with such a gorgeous comment. 'voice is wow' and 'I could listen to it all day' just melts my heart. :) And again that you could feel the emotion, I am so happy you that liked this one also. Thank you so much. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
13th Feb 2021 2:37pm
13th Feb 2021 3:05pm
Hi SinganiYadav, A very warm welcome to DUP and thank you so much for the wonderful comment. I am so happy you found it beautiful and real. :) 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
Anonymous
23rd Feb 2021 9:06pm
KristinaX, thank you for this beautiful piece!
23rd Feb 2021 9:13pm
Hi Viktoria, Thank you so much! I am so happy you found this and thought it was beautiful. Also, Viktoria is a really beautiful name. :) 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
Anonymous
23rd Feb 2021 9:14pm
Thank you girl, with a beautiful name!!!
4th Mar 2021 8:54pm
L this all over again
You have a luxurious voice I can believe in ...
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You have a luxurious voice I can believe in ...
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4th Mar 2021 9:45pm
Love all the L you are throwing out today. 'Luxurious' now that is an awesome compliment that I am not sure I can believe in but I love it anyway. lol BIG L. 💌🌺🌸🌹💋
