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poppycock
(I)
don't hush me too hard
i didn't come here for you
your words are up against apathy
you've already lost
(II)
don't psychology me too deeply
i did not let you in
your assumptions are mistaken
you were just being you
(III)
don't fictionalise me too much
i didn't try to be someone else
your looking glass alice
is in your head
don't hush me too hard
i didn't come here for you
your words are up against apathy
you've already lost
(II)
don't psychology me too deeply
i did not let you in
your assumptions are mistaken
you were just being you
(III)
don't fictionalise me too much
i didn't try to be someone else
your looking glass alice
is in your head
Author's Note
written for the 20 words competition.
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Re. poppycock
12th Jan 2021 7:22pm
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12th Jan 2021 7:33pm
Re. poppycock
13th Jan 2021 2:15pm
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13th Jan 2021 2:22pm
Thank you O and you're welcome. I'm going to throw an audio in for this one. Appreciate your time.
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13th Jan 2021 2:56pm
Re. poppycock
13th Jan 2021 10:40pm
Great job on the video for this one. I love how every piece starts with the word “don’t” - really communicates the spirit of all three mini pieces.
Really lovely stuff.
-M
Really lovely stuff.
-M
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Re: Re. poppycock
13th Jan 2021 11:13pm
Thank you Missy. I was trying to get across the message about controlling personalities who build a version of you in their own head and try and tell you that is who you are, when they have no actual clue, who you are.
I used to love the 20 word thread, it inspired me to write, as your competition has. :)
I used to love the 20 word thread, it inspired me to write, as your competition has. :)
Re. poppycock
16th Jan 2021 8:17pm
The English accents I hear on audio are always pleasant to listen to. You describe the disconnect between what someone assumes they'll get only to head up against a wall of reality built with the bricks of respect and dignity.
An enjoyable read and listen.
An enjoyable read and listen.
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Re: Re. poppycock
16th Jan 2021 9:27pm
Thank you Relic. It was very much a hammer and nail piece. Much appreciated.
Re. poppycock
25th Jan 2021 10:03pm
i came for the word poppycock
you hardly hear it anymore so
thank you for the comeback :)
i really loved these little bursts
of unapologeticness that came
through your stanzas and voice,
also tying it to looking glass alice
certainly lended a simple yet
powerful image
thank you for sharing
these impactful gems
magdalena :)
-ethan
you hardly hear it anymore so
thank you for the comeback :)
i really loved these little bursts
of unapologeticness that came
through your stanzas and voice,
also tying it to looking glass alice
certainly lended a simple yet
powerful image
thank you for sharing
these impactful gems
magdalena :)
-ethan
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Re: Re. poppycock
Yesterday 10:56am
Thank you ethan, great to see you back here. "poppycock" used to be an everyday english word back in the day and I agree, I never hear it used anymore. It just popped into my head.
I get sick of controlling people, so this was definitely burst of unapologeticness.
always appreciate time. :)
I get sick of controlling people, so this was definitely burst of unapologeticness.
always appreciate time. :)