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Cutting Onions
I cling aimlessly
to failure,
like a sailor
to his sinking ship
peeling back
another layer,
of this stinking shit
that coats my core
cutting onions is such a chore
this leaky faucet
needs a fix,
and it's beginning to drip
into every facet
of my life
little ripples rise—
to the surface
of Lake Placid,
growing nervous
into flowing rapids
silly rabbit
just when you thought
this storm was passing,
your stomach's churning
and the waves are crashing
this cup is ever full—
as the dam reaches max capacity
a catastrophe is inevitable
to failure,
like a sailor
to his sinking ship
peeling back
another layer,
of this stinking shit
that coats my core
cutting onions is such a chore
this leaky faucet
needs a fix,
and it's beginning to drip
into every facet
of my life
little ripples rise—
to the surface
of Lake Placid,
growing nervous
into flowing rapids
silly rabbit
just when you thought
this storm was passing,
your stomach's churning
and the waves are crashing
this cup is ever full—
as the dam reaches max capacity
a catastrophe is inevitable
Published 10th Jan 2021
Author's Note
It's not so bad, just feeling overwhelmed and a bit negative
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10th Jan 2021 2:19am
10th Jan 2021 2:25am
You keep chasing the woman, you will find the right one for you. Keep on writing.
Anonymous
- Edited 10th Jan 2021 6:30am
10th Jan 2021 4:31am
Your open and relatable writes always touch me deeply, NB. You're honest when most try to hide behind. Thank you for this spill and all it's truthful beauty.
🌹
xo
🌹
xo
10th Jan 2021 10:01am
10th Jan 2021 10:59am
NB your poetic brilliance leaves nothing on the table. Your verse is a personal shared emotional experience....another masterfully inked write brother!
10th Jan 2021 4:51pm
I think anyome who's not feeling this at least a little is just not paying attention.... Your beautiful expression here allows us to share that lament, making the burden a little less. Thank you.
Darn onions.... 😉
Darn onions.... 😉
10th Jan 2021 6:26pm
You have captured the human condition perfectly, NB. Well written.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
hugs,
buddhakitty.
11th Jan 2021 2:15pm
13th Jan 2021 1:15am
13th Jan 2021 4:03pm
NB, you've used many enigmatic and yet clear metaphors, expressing a profound and relatable emotion. It's visually and emotionally perceptible.
Hope things get better.
Thank you for sharing.
Hope things get better.
Thank you for sharing.
14th Jan 2021 6:42pm
Like Shrek... ;) Peeling back this onion was beautiful and incredibly meaningful. Another stellar write NB.
It's not so bad. Clinging aimlessly to failiure is better than clinging to it with purpose.
22nd Jan 2021 12:16pm
8th Feb 2021 2:32am
