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Happy 2021
Driven by how finite, all that exists / Laugh at a tragic years finish / It passed so many limits / Keep waiting for the after-credits / Some last minute bit / Some absurdist twist / Some astronauts vs ninjas kinda shit / Searching for larks always yields a lift / What persists / When you only kick it / With the hardest of the smartest / Darkest days equal longest nights / Wrong vs Right / Palm my verse like an affectionate dog bite / Take every day on Earth like a first night
Published 1st Jan 2021
Author's Note
Happy new year’s
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2nd Jan 2021 00:35am
Which words were the bad ones?
As criticism goes “do better words “ is the verbal blank stare. I write for myself and my own release. If anyone gets a lift from my work that’s all love, but I don’t write for an audience. If it doesn’t reach you it wasn’t meant for you.
If there’s a particular point you’d like to see raised or there’s an avenue that grabs you but it belongs elsewhere just let me know and expound on that. Otherwise I’ll write what the demons and voices whisper to me.
Why don’t you compose your own flow and see how it sounds? No sarcasm, but it makes for a better critic
As criticism goes “do better words “ is the verbal blank stare. I write for myself and my own release. If anyone gets a lift from my work that’s all love, but I don’t write for an audience. If it doesn’t reach you it wasn’t meant for you.
If there’s a particular point you’d like to see raised or there’s an avenue that grabs you but it belongs elsewhere just let me know and expound on that. Otherwise I’ll write what the demons and voices whisper to me.
Why don’t you compose your own flow and see how it sounds? No sarcasm, but it makes for a better critic
