no dodge

I love his melding of sentences! You did him good!

Thanks! His subversion of expectations is a lovely reading experience. For me it really blends with my desire to capture paradox in poems.

Yeah I thought you had made a typo....though I initially liked it...

but the Paul S 'style' inspiration, once I realized,  makes this so powerful.

Thank you. I have found several different ways to read it and meanings. Paul is brilliant.

Perhaps I am missing something, but it seems it would read better as

"you have been".

This was written in the style of dartford to capture a moment that had layered pulling in multiple directions. I get that it is a challenge as a reader.

Okays. I'll keep working at it. :)

this feels so true

thank you

It is amazing to me how a few words like this can stop me in my tracks

Mmmm