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something's not right
yes of course we're judged
on our lives, if not by a god then
by ourselves and our peers nervously out into the night ..
Published 15th Dec 2020
| Edited 16th Dec 2020
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16th Dec 2020 00:31am
16th Dec 2020 1:48am
”... nervously out into the night” is a perfectly judged phrase to close on, conveying the fear and chaos of human judgement in a universe without objective moral guidance. The poem would look a lot more polished if you replaced the comma with a line break and removed the two-dot ellipsis entirely, but I know that’s a matter of taste.
16th Dec 2020 1:58am
