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an origin of blue.
Standing on the perimeter
within my own fabricated bubble
Some came, some left
Battered and bruised, I remained
Circling the outside, head barely above sea level
You.
saw.
me.
All alone
and pretending not to care
Your intrigue became my biggest fortune
Oh what a glorious spectacle
Pure gold at the end of a rainbow
Fueled, pollinated by fierce spirit
I was undiscovered
There~ untapped,
barely a whisper of inspiration;
It was your introduction
that ripped me wide open
Beautiful Blue, spill(ed) forth
a never before
Was unleashed, unveiled and truly unburdened
and now reinforced by you,
I, could finally see....
—me
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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
6th Dec 2020 9:37pm
Re. an origin of blue.
6th Dec 2020 9:40pm
Excellent way to capture the climax of the poem:
"Beautiful Blue, spill(ed) forth
a never before
Was unleashed, unveiled and truly unburdened
and now reinforced"
Thanks for sharing it! < ;.p 3
"Beautiful Blue, spill(ed) forth
a never before
Was unleashed, unveiled and truly unburdened
and now reinforced"
Thanks for sharing it! < ;.p 3
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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
I thank you muchly for your read, the list add and your thoughtful comments...and I'm glad you found some enjoyment within my little spill....
-always a pleasure,
💜🌹💜
xo
B
-always a pleasure,
💜🌹💜
xo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
6th Dec 2020 9:59pm
Re: Re. an origin of blue.
6th Dec 2020 10:01pm
Thank you, dearest Stoney! I'm so so glad for your visit. Much love and respect back to you as well
🌹 💜 🌹
🙏
B
🌹 💜 🌹
🙏
B
Re: Re. an origin of blue.
6th Dec 2020 10:05pm
Re. an origin of blue.
6th Dec 2020 10:14pm
This appears to be an extension of your last poem. No long review here. Your tribute is well expressed.
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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
6th Dec 2020 10:17pm
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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
Weg,
I'm overwhelmed by your thoughts and sticking to my sans self depreciation pact, sooo - Thank you very much. Yours, is a voice that I can't believe I was lucky enough to stumble across. I must of done something right, somewhere for karma to smile down upon me...
💜
xoxo
Velv
I'm overwhelmed by your thoughts and sticking to my sans self depreciation pact, sooo - Thank you very much. Yours, is a voice that I can't believe I was lucky enough to stumble across. I must of done something right, somewhere for karma to smile down upon me...
💜
xoxo
Velv
Re. an origin of blue.
6th Dec 2020 11:00pm
Re: Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 00:01am
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 00:30am
Re: Re. an origin of blue.
Happy Holidays, TROME
it's why my avatar took of all her clothes
Love Your Visit
💜🌹💜
Ty for reading and your comments
the RL add too!
xo
B
it's why my avatar took of all her clothes
Love Your Visit
💜🌹💜
Ty for reading and your comments
the RL add too!
xo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 1:15am
Re: Re. an origin of blue.
I love your visit...
🌷
xo
Ty for your
thoughts and the
generosity of the RL add
💜
🌷
xo
Ty for your
thoughts and the
generosity of the RL add
💜
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 1:45am
Re: Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 1:54am
Ty so much, Eerie
I'm very glad to see you (love your pic!)
and appreciate that comment.
I often don't feel very cool so nicely put!
💜 🌹
Happy you enjoyed it
xoxo
B
I'm very glad to see you (love your pic!)
and appreciate that comment.
I often don't feel very cool so nicely put!
💜 🌹
Happy you enjoyed it
xoxo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 1:49am
....always such a distinct and stylish elegance pours from your writing. Who doesn't want wade in your beautiful blue spills? This self discovery of exceptional creativity BLUE me away, like so many of your other post ! Bravo!!!
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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 2:13am
Thank youuuuuuu!
I'm so grateful for your thoughts and taking the time with me and my writing as a whole. It's extremely generous of you.
The comments you lay down leave my head spinning because I'm so self critical.
saying Ty isn't really enough....
yet I do.
🙏 🌹 💜
xo
B
I'm so grateful for your thoughts and taking the time with me and my writing as a whole. It's extremely generous of you.
The comments you lay down leave my head spinning because I'm so self critical.
saying Ty isn't really enough....
yet I do.
🙏 🌹 💜
xo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 3:52am
Very beautiful orgin poem about you. Very hot profile picture. Would you ever put a profile picture of you in a bikini, LOL.? Keep on writing.
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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 3:53am
haha... not even remotely....
Thank you for reading Francisco
🌹
appreciate it
Thank you for reading Francisco
🌹
appreciate it
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 3:55am
Re: Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 4:02am
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 4:46am
Dear Bluevelvete,
What a wonderful reveal of yourself. I am indebted to whoever opened up your fantastic, sensual, intelligent package of fine art.
The passage that touched me most is,
"Your intrigue became my biggest fortune"
What an intoxicating feeling it must be to have someone actually intrigued by you...add me to that list.
Your poetry is an enthralling revelation😘
What a wonderful reveal of yourself. I am indebted to whoever opened up your fantastic, sensual, intelligent package of fine art.
The passage that touched me most is,
"Your intrigue became my biggest fortune"
What an intoxicating feeling it must be to have someone actually intrigued by you...add me to that list.
Your poetry is an enthralling revelation😘
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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
You're kindness of thought is a beautiful read on a cool rainy morning. I thank you profusely for the sentiments left. I am humbled and thoroughly enjoy the fact that this spill was of some found resonance with you. Your display of confidence in me isn't taken lightly and I bask, (without the worth you claim) , in all these gorgeous comments bestowed.
Ty Ty
I'm appreciative of the RL add as well...
Much love and respect,
🌹 🌹 🌹
xoxo
B
Ty Ty
I'm appreciative of the RL add as well...
Much love and respect,
🌹 🌹 🌹
xoxo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 4:57am
Dear BV,
It’s always such a high when either we, ourselves, realize our own worth as well as when someone else elevates us. My only gripe is I wish it would last a lot longer than it does before I sink into that hole of self loathing.
This write is such a glorious revelation of self and beauty. Your direct manner in writing is so enviable and clear visioned it is a joy to read. H🌷
It’s always such a high when either we, ourselves, realize our own worth as well as when someone else elevates us. My only gripe is I wish it would last a lot longer than it does before I sink into that hole of self loathing.
This write is such a glorious revelation of self and beauty. Your direct manner in writing is so enviable and clear visioned it is a joy to read. H🌷
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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 2:54pm
Dearest H,
My clearest joy of vision?... comments like yours that uplift and remind me of my positive attributes as opposed to where my mind is conditioned to go, the awful spiral of self doubt. So, I humbly thank you for such kind words and a sentiment that I tuck in tight and take with me, today. My "one up" on everyone else.... your faith in me is my Monday's hidden sunshine.
I'm so grateful for your RL add and you taking the time.
Much love and respect,
🌹 🌹 🌹
xoxo
B
My clearest joy of vision?... comments like yours that uplift and remind me of my positive attributes as opposed to where my mind is conditioned to go, the awful spiral of self doubt. So, I humbly thank you for such kind words and a sentiment that I tuck in tight and take with me, today. My "one up" on everyone else.... your faith in me is my Monday's hidden sunshine.
I'm so grateful for your RL add and you taking the time.
Much love and respect,
🌹 🌹 🌹
xoxo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 5:12am
Beautiful and awesome write about the wonderful blue.
Bravo blue, Well done
Bravo blue, Well done
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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 2:57pm
Oh Swagger!
I'm a lil smilin' Blue from ear to ear, reading your much appreciated kind words. I Thank you for the RL add and couldn't be more pleased that you found something in my spill that touched you.
Your opinion is important to me and I I'm grateful
💜
xoxo
B
I'm a lil smilin' Blue from ear to ear, reading your much appreciated kind words. I Thank you for the RL add and couldn't be more pleased that you found something in my spill that touched you.
Your opinion is important to me and I I'm grateful
💜
xoxo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 7:00am
Wow... mystical miss blue⚘...... SCREAMING from the deep in a self liberation..!! Just stunning miss blue... you deserve you.... 🌹
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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 3:07pm
My Elias,
I cannot convey properly....
Ty for your lovely, LOVELY support. Your beautiful comments are a very much loved and appreciated.
I new you'd say something that had my head nodding in nothing but agreement. Your kindness is a treat and my heart and soul look so forward to your visits. Ty for the RL add, your sentiments and everything.... it all.
Much love and respect,
🌹 🌹 🌹
xoxo
B
I cannot convey properly....
Ty for your lovely, LOVELY support. Your beautiful comments are a very much loved and appreciated.
I new you'd say something that had my head nodding in nothing but agreement. Your kindness is a treat and my heart and soul look so forward to your visits. Ty for the RL add, your sentiments and everything.... it all.
Much love and respect,
🌹 🌹 🌹
xoxo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 10:46am
Re: Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 2:59pm
I'm certainly trying!
Ty Ty for your comments and RL add...
I'm so glad you enjoyed and appreciate your visits, so
🌹💜🌹
xoxo
B
Ty Ty for your comments and RL add...
I'm so glad you enjoyed and appreciate your visits, so
🌹💜🌹
xoxo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
Anonymous
7th Dec 2020 3:05pm
I'll have a slice of this, Blue. Super-romantic and the conclusion is beautiful. What's not to like? I'm off now to read it again👍👍👍.

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Re. an origin of blue.
lol..
You flatter me Wilber.. I'm extremely thankful!
and humbled to be added to your RL!
🙏 🌹 💜
xo
B
You flatter me Wilber.. I'm extremely thankful!
and humbled to be added to your RL!
🙏 🌹 💜
xo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 4:28pm
You are and will always be you, discovered or not...everyone is uniquely beautiful and your beauty shines with kindness.
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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 4:30pm
*totally and 100% noted
(seriously.)
For reminding me that I am enough-💜
my friend 🙏 🌹
Ty Ty
xoxo
B
(seriously.)
For reminding me that I am enough-💜
my friend 🙏 🌹
Ty Ty
xoxo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
Anonymous
7th Dec 2020 5:59pm
Your generosity inspired me to dig a little deeper.
WOW. Loneliness. Discovery. Release.
"barely a whisper of inspiration;
It was your introduction
that ripped me wide open "
Are you kidding me? We curl up in protective poses and, if we are lucky, someone comes along and frees us up to be ourselves. At least that is how I see this.
Was unleashed, unveiled and truly unburdened
and now reinforced by you,
I, could finally see....
An emotion like that is like a religious miracle. This is powerful.
WOW. Loneliness. Discovery. Release.
"barely a whisper of inspiration;
It was your introduction
that ripped me wide open "
Are you kidding me? We curl up in protective poses and, if we are lucky, someone comes along and frees us up to be ourselves. At least that is how I see this.
Was unleashed, unveiled and truly unburdened
and now reinforced by you,
I, could finally see....
An emotion like that is like a religious miracle. This is powerful.

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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 7:30pm
Wow... what a comment, Ty very much
💜
I'm extremely glad to make your acquaintance today.
xoxo
B
💜
I'm extremely glad to make your acquaintance today.
xoxo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 7:27pm
Not sure what critique or praise I can give this piece but except to say, perfect.
Beautiful work.
Beautiful work.
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Re: Re. an origin of blue.
7th Dec 2020 7:31pm
Re. an origin of blue.
8th Dec 2020 7:36pm
Re: Re. an origin of blue.
8th Dec 2020 7:51pm
I cannot express just how good it is to see your avatar on my page! I'm glad you are feeling better, take it slow and listen to the Dr's (I'm a mother hen, I know) make sure not to 'over do'... Ty for reading and the list add. Your own spill was ONE FIRE... keep that spirit burning.
💜 💜
xoxo
B
💜 💜
xoxo
B
Re. an origin of blue.
7th Feb 2021 6:20am
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7th Feb 2021 9:36am