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Once upon a time
Like the ring on my finger our love was once a beautiful piece of stone, But time has taken its shine and I’ve never felt more alone.
Published 4th Dec 2020
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4th Dec 2020 6:16am
Dear M,
You’ve managed to write a beautiful poem on a sad experience. I really like how you’ve used an emotion in comparison to a tangible object and then again to describe the coldness of being alone. And all of that in such brevity. Succinctly well written. I’m terribly sorry if this is a current situation. I only wish it’s brief and you find someone worth your love. H🌷
You’ve managed to write a beautiful poem on a sad experience. I really like how you’ve used an emotion in comparison to a tangible object and then again to describe the coldness of being alone. And all of that in such brevity. Succinctly well written. I’m terribly sorry if this is a current situation. I only wish it’s brief and you find someone worth your love. H🌷
