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Awaken The Moon
Deadwood
has fallen
Hope of a better you, stretched thin
skin shredding,
wrinkled with guilt and shame.
Awaken the moon, water child
You are heirloom blossoms
free, pale yellow petals.
Breakaway
Muted gray deception
Rancid oils puddled on the landscape
of your perceived horizon
Etui lined
in printed silk
holds fabricated images
of hearts beating,
bleeding into effervescence
A metronome
boxed, in infinite rhythm
has fallen
Hope of a better you, stretched thin
skin shredding,
wrinkled with guilt and shame.
Awaken the moon, water child
You are heirloom blossoms
free, pale yellow petals.
Breakaway
Muted gray deception
Rancid oils puddled on the landscape
of your perceived horizon
Etui lined
in printed silk
holds fabricated images
of hearts beating,
bleeding into effervescence
A metronome
boxed, in infinite rhythm
Published 2nd Dec 2020
| Edited 3rd Dec 2020
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Anonymous
2nd Dec 2020 8:30pm
killer
2nd Dec 2020 8:51pm
Good to see you resurface, Dhyanna. And with such a beautifully crafted lunar offering. 🌕❤
2nd Dec 2020 8:54pm
2nd Dec 2020 8:55pm
Anonymous
3rd Dec 2020 00:25am
hello my dear friend, .. from across the void
maybe you will raid England with me
maybe you will raid England with me
3rd Dec 2020 00:37am
2nd Dec 2020 10:11pm
3rd Dec 2020 00:36am
3rd Dec 2020 4:00am
13th Dec 2020 8:40pm
Beautiful. Made me think of death and rebirth. keep writing, you are talented. I am a sister of the moon, so you had me at ''Awaken the moon, water child.''
13th Dec 2020 10:04pm
As am I with my birth name and an Aquarian water child
Thank you so much
Thank you so much
The opening image is interesting. “Dead wood has fallen” - a lot of people forget that dead wood actually nourishes its surroundings. It gives back to the natural surroundings, to re-purpose and re-grow. Kinda where I’m at.
I think that transcends through the poem to the ending lines of “a metronome boxed of infinite rhythm” which shows that all of it is necessary. All of it driving a beat through our lives if we only hear.
The imagery is really concise throughout. I really enjoyed the entirety. Thank you for sharing.
-M
I think that transcends through the poem to the ending lines of “a metronome boxed of infinite rhythm” which shows that all of it is necessary. All of it driving a beat through our lives if we only hear.
The imagery is really concise throughout. I really enjoyed the entirety. Thank you for sharing.
-M
14th Jan 2021 8:13am
Yes, you have gleaned the benefits of the beauty of the word Deadwood
Another concept is persons that no longer bring you peace comfort or solace
Sometimes we have to let go to grow
It's good to have you back
Another concept is persons that no longer bring you peace comfort or solace
Sometimes we have to let go to grow
It's good to have you back
