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Senryu Menu II
(K)
Why do we fear things?
In the end it comes around
to what it will be.
(L)
If you had been at
liberty to speak, would you
have said you love me?
(M)
I see a future
devoid of pain and sorrow
T’would I live that long.
(N1)
I’m afraid you’ve seen
me through such dirty lenses.
A shadow of dust-
***
(N2)
I am to the world.
Merely swept into the bin
and lost forever.
(O)
Praying and hoping,
my wish, at last was granted.
No returns...damn it!
(P)
Lost civility
my niche of solitude has
provided me strength.
(Q)
In sunshine I found
a wonderful surprise and
learned to love myself.
(R)
Lies and secrets are
not at all interesting.
Only deceitful.
(S)
You hide your beauty
behind a thick veil of pain.
I love you anyway.
(T)
Is this really it?
This is the summit of my
hard work and toil?
(U)
I walked a mile
in his shoes and found that I’m
better at his job.
(V1)
I can’t help wonder
if events were different
would we all have met?
(V2)
Amidst a dreamscape,
I fell sick for love of you.
I’m fine, now get lost.
(W)
Taking advantage
Makes me hate you even more.
Why continue it?
(X)
Denying your age
Will not make you sexier
Only pathetic.
(Y)
I loved romance but
I never understood it.
I wish I could have.
(Z)
Zed. The end is nigh.
I’ve enjoyed these senryu
I hope you have too.
Why do we fear things?
In the end it comes around
to what it will be.
(L)
If you had been at
liberty to speak, would you
have said you love me?
(M)
I see a future
devoid of pain and sorrow
T’would I live that long.
(N1)
I’m afraid you’ve seen
me through such dirty lenses.
A shadow of dust-
***
(N2)
I am to the world.
Merely swept into the bin
and lost forever.
(O)
Praying and hoping,
my wish, at last was granted.
No returns...damn it!
(P)
Lost civility
my niche of solitude has
provided me strength.
(Q)
In sunshine I found
a wonderful surprise and
learned to love myself.
(R)
Lies and secrets are
not at all interesting.
Only deceitful.
(S)
You hide your beauty
behind a thick veil of pain.
I love you anyway.
(T)
Is this really it?
This is the summit of my
hard work and toil?
(U)
I walked a mile
in his shoes and found that I’m
better at his job.
(V1)
I can’t help wonder
if events were different
would we all have met?
(V2)
Amidst a dreamscape,
I fell sick for love of you.
I’m fine, now get lost.
(W)
Taking advantage
Makes me hate you even more.
Why continue it?
(X)
Denying your age
Will not make you sexier
Only pathetic.
(Y)
I loved romance but
I never understood it.
I wish I could have.
(Z)
Zed. The end is nigh.
I’ve enjoyed these senryu
I hope you have too.
Published 2nd Dec 2020
| Edited 18th Dec 2020
Author's Note
Once again, I would be interested, to know which, if any, spoke louder than others. 🤔
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2nd Dec 2020 5:05am
I love every single one of these SO much, but this one really spoke to me:
(K)
Why do we fear things?
In the end it comes around
to what it will be.
There is so much peace in acceptance 💜
(K)
Why do we fear things?
In the end it comes around
to what it will be.
There is so much peace in acceptance 💜
4th Dec 2020 5:09am
Dear L,
Thank you for the RL honor.
Acceptance is the center of so many things and yet for me, I spend so much of my time fighting it. Why, you ask? No clue. Alas, when I finally do accept things I breathe easier and wonder why I didn’t do it sooner. I’m such an ijit. Thank you so much for your beautiful comments. I’m ever so grateful. H🌷
Thank you for the RL honor.
Acceptance is the center of so many things and yet for me, I spend so much of my time fighting it. Why, you ask? No clue. Alas, when I finally do accept things I breathe easier and wonder why I didn’t do it sooner. I’m such an ijit. Thank you so much for your beautiful comments. I’m ever so grateful. H🌷
Anonymous
- Edited 2nd Dec 2020 5:31am
2nd Dec 2020 5:25am
Yes!
I loooooved this piece last time and even more now! Who says sequels aren't as good!?!? That's certainly phooey here! This installment is
A W E S O M E!
The choosing process was a bitch,
(like Luna said, they were ALL so very good) but I had to dig deep and recognize that yes, I do love to "save the broken ones" Hence =
(S)
You hide your beauty
behind a thick veil of pain.
I love you anyway.
The 17 syllables of my life... lol
You nailed it and I'm now in desperate need of some self introspection and perhaps a jaunt back into therapy. Thank you!... lmao
I love this idea so very much and your brilliant beautiful heart, too
Ty for sharing it with us all.
💜🌹💜🌹💜
xo
B
I loooooved this piece last time and even more now! Who says sequels aren't as good!?!? That's certainly phooey here! This installment is
A W E S O M E!
The choosing process was a bitch,
(like Luna said, they were ALL so very good) but I had to dig deep and recognize that yes, I do love to "save the broken ones" Hence =
(S)
You hide your beauty
behind a thick veil of pain.
I love you anyway.
The 17 syllables of my life... lol
You nailed it and I'm now in desperate need of some self introspection and perhaps a jaunt back into therapy. Thank you!... lmao
I love this idea so very much and your brilliant beautiful heart, too
Ty for sharing it with us all.
💜🌹💜🌹💜
xo
B
4th Dec 2020 5:16am
Dear BV,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I so often wonder why folks can’t just be themselves and then I get annoyed with them. Then I realize I do the same thing and I dig a deeper hole in which to hide. Go figure. If only we could appreciate our own beauty. What would the world look like then? Thank you so very much for these overwhelmingly kind and sweet comments. I’m touched beyond measure. Thank you again. H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I so often wonder why folks can’t just be themselves and then I get annoyed with them. Then I realize I do the same thing and I dig a deeper hole in which to hide. Go figure. If only we could appreciate our own beauty. What would the world look like then? Thank you so very much for these overwhelmingly kind and sweet comments. I’m touched beyond measure. Thank you again. H🌷
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4th Dec 2020 5:20am
Dear MLC,
Thank you very much for your read and thoughtful comments. Interestingly enough I had DUP in mind when I wrote V and so appreciative of the wonderful people sharing their talent on this site. Thank you once again. H🌷
Thank you very much for your read and thoughtful comments. Interestingly enough I had DUP in mind when I wrote V and so appreciative of the wonderful people sharing their talent on this site. Thank you once again. H🌷
2nd Dec 2020 6:43am
Wow! I really love this as much as your first ones. They were all very relatable in one way or another so I am hard pressed to pick a favorite one. So instead, I will pick two because they stand out the most to me and are both brilliant. So I am picking the last two of them. Great work!
4th Dec 2020 5:25am
Dear FM,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I’m ever so grateful for your gracious comments. They’re so uplifting and supportive. I’m so flattered and so appreciative that I’ll stop here before I start stumbling on my words. Thank you once more! H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I’m ever so grateful for your gracious comments. They’re so uplifting and supportive. I’m so flattered and so appreciative that I’ll stop here before I start stumbling on my words. Thank you once more! H🌷
2nd Dec 2020 7:40am
Such a lovely collection of Senryu H
Was a joy to read all of them
but ...
this ...
(Q)
In sunshine I found
a wonderful surprise and
learned to love myself.
This is beautiful
She always amazes me with her words
Was a joy to read all of them
but ...
this ...
(Q)
In sunshine I found
a wonderful surprise and
learned to love myself.
This is beautiful
She always amazes me with her words
4th Dec 2020 5:32am
Dear WS,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
Ah, manna from heaven if/when we can love ourselves for the goodness we are.
Your sweet and kind comments are an absolute present to me- I’m fumbling for words better than thank you and dang if I can find any. So, once again thank you for this lovely response. H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
Ah, manna from heaven if/when we can love ourselves for the goodness we are.
Your sweet and kind comments are an absolute present to me- I’m fumbling for words better than thank you and dang if I can find any. So, once again thank you for this lovely response. H🌷
2nd Dec 2020 3:22pm
4th Dec 2020 5:39am
Dear L,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
Thank you so much for your kind response. I hope the younger generation and those that follow will know less pain and suffering. Until then we write...thank you again for your sweetness. It makes the pain tolerable. H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
Thank you so much for your kind response. I hope the younger generation and those that follow will know less pain and suffering. Until then we write...thank you again for your sweetness. It makes the pain tolerable. H🌷
2nd Dec 2020 8:58pm
I love Q for the beauty of self realization and love. Plus it's bright and cheery. ☀😊
4th Dec 2020 5:45am
Dear A,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
Q is bright and cheery. I sure wish it didn’t take so long to achieve and cost so much to maintain. 😉
I am so grateful for your kind support and thoughtful insights. Makes the world much brighter. H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
Q is bright and cheery. I sure wish it didn’t take so long to achieve and cost so much to maintain. 😉
I am so grateful for your kind support and thoughtful insights. Makes the world much brighter. H🌷
3rd Dec 2020 9:17pm
I wrote this to friends the other night,
I doubt there are many things more exquisite than being an artist, a rage of joy in it's creation, music of the all light pouring through me, where all things are power in the heart thrown wide, all loss, fear and pain are transformed from illusion to awakening. Art is an act of God.
I doubt there are many things more exquisite than being an artist, a rage of joy in it's creation, music of the all light pouring through me, where all things are power in the heart thrown wide, all loss, fear and pain are transformed from illusion to awakening. Art is an act of God.
4th Dec 2020 5:51am
Dear D,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I think you are correct in all of your assessments regarding art and the people who create it. Madness, joy, pain, insecurity all rolled into a heap of fabulous! Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful insights. I’m so appreciative. H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I think you are correct in all of your assessments regarding art and the people who create it. Madness, joy, pain, insecurity all rolled into a heap of fabulous! Thank you so much for sharing your wonderful insights. I’m so appreciative. H🌷
3rd Dec 2020 10:44pm
These have been little messages of wisdom spread out beautifully on diverse items.
Thank you for sharing.
Superb work.
Thank you for sharing.
Superb work.
4th Dec 2020 5:55am
Dear W,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I’m extremely flattered by your sweet comments. I’m rather partial to audience participation and I’m so grateful for your input and generous compliments. Once more, thank so much. H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I’m extremely flattered by your sweet comments. I’m rather partial to audience participation and I’m so grateful for your input and generous compliments. Once more, thank so much. H🌷
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7th Dec 2020 4:06am
Dear RB,
Have I taught you nothing?! Don't just give stuff away! Charge double for everything then negotiate. How many times must I remind you before you pay attention?! Oy 🙄
Thank you very much for the honor of your RL and super sweet comment. I’m smiling by your kindness behind my wagging index finger. H🌷
Have I taught you nothing?! Don't just give stuff away! Charge double for everything then negotiate. How many times must I remind you before you pay attention?! Oy 🙄
Thank you very much for the honor of your RL and super sweet comment. I’m smiling by your kindness behind my wagging index finger. H🌷
8th Dec 2020 9:45am
Wow sensational interesting bunches of verses, you muse in a fabulous way. My favourites were the niche stanza, the veil s stanza, and the ending seems a bit sarcastic all so nice. Kudos!!
Plz pleez do read and comment my newest poem too.
Plz pleez do read and comment my newest poem too.
10th Dec 2020 6:04am
Dear Z K,
Thank you for your read and kind comments. I’ve enjoyed hearing what these thoughts have meant for everyone. I look forward to reading your latest entry. I’m very glad you told me about it. Thank you again.
H🌷
Thank you for your read and kind comments. I’ve enjoyed hearing what these thoughts have meant for everyone. I look forward to reading your latest entry. I’m very glad you told me about it. Thank you again.
H🌷
8th Dec 2020 11:47pm
10th Dec 2020 5:45am
Dear M,
Thank you very much for your kind comment. I very much appreciate it.
H🌷
Thank you very much for your kind comment. I very much appreciate it.
H🌷
10th Dec 2020 2:21pm
8th Dec 2020 11:49pm
How did I overlook this for long. It is absolutely amazing like the last one...
As for the question -
(P)
Lost civility
my niche of solitude has
provided me strength.
(S)
You hide your beauty
behind a thick veil of pain.
I love you anyway.
As for the question -
(P)
Lost civility
my niche of solitude has
provided me strength.
(S)
You hide your beauty
behind a thick veil of pain.
I love you anyway.
10th Dec 2020 5:59am
Dear K,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
P and S, yes! To have a place you can call your own when the world becomes way too much is a tonic to make things bearable once again.
To be loved by someone no matter how much you don't love yourself is the greatest gift. I think these are touchstones for survival and I’m so grateful for your reading these minuscule insights and your sweet compliments. Thank you. H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
P and S, yes! To have a place you can call your own when the world becomes way too much is a tonic to make things bearable once again.
To be loved by someone no matter how much you don't love yourself is the greatest gift. I think these are touchstones for survival and I’m so grateful for your reading these minuscule insights and your sweet compliments. Thank you. H🌷
13th Dec 2020 10:31pm
Great. Liked the most:
"Why do we fear things?
In the end it comes around
to what it will be."
And also:
"I can’t help wonder
if events were different
would we all have met"
"Why do we fear things?
In the end it comes around
to what it will be."
And also:
"I can’t help wonder
if events were different
would we all have met"
14th Dec 2020 3:48am
Dear L,
Thank you kindly for your read and selections. For me, I spend so much of my time fretting about the possibilities of circumstances over which I have no control, I could probably buy back years of my life if I knew how to relax. Thank you again. H🌷
Thank you kindly for your read and selections. For me, I spend so much of my time fretting about the possibilities of circumstances over which I have no control, I could probably buy back years of my life if I knew how to relax. Thank you again. H🌷
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14th Dec 2020 4:28pm
Dear AC,
Thank you for reading my humble submission and your kind and gracious compliments. It is a precarious moment in time. One in which I can’t wait to have pass. I look forward to peace for us all. Thank you again for your thoughtfulness.
H🌷
Thank you for reading my humble submission and your kind and gracious compliments. It is a precarious moment in time. One in which I can’t wait to have pass. I look forward to peace for us all. Thank you again for your thoughtfulness.
H🌷
17th Dec 2020 8:10pm
OH MY GAWD how did I miss this?!? These are so good! For me, it’s V. So many times in my younger years. I don’t know if it’s good to admit that...
18th Dec 2020 8:34am
Dear E,
Love is a fickle business and sometimes I thought it worked out best to love from afar once I actually met the person I went coo coo for. It’s so odd how the head and heart work. I wish I could only claim this happenstance in my younger years! 😏 Thank you for the honor of RL.
H🌷
Love is a fickle business and sometimes I thought it worked out best to love from afar once I actually met the person I went coo coo for. It’s so odd how the head and heart work. I wish I could only claim this happenstance in my younger years! 😏 Thank you for the honor of RL.
H🌷
20th Dec 2020 4:18pm
The structure of this is original and interesting. The poem feels like an internal dialogue as someone tries to figure out what to do regarding a difficult emotional situation. This Senryu was my favourite, because it’s the wittiest:
”I walked a mile
in his shoes and found that I’m
better at his job.”
I'd prefer the poem to have more images, mainly because the raw natural image is the soul of short Asian poetic forms like Senryu. I recommend trying another set of Senryu where each one has at least one word describing a natural phenomenon (i.e. sunlight, grass, etc.).
”I walked a mile
in his shoes and found that I’m
better at his job.”
I'd prefer the poem to have more images, mainly because the raw natural image is the soul of short Asian poetic forms like Senryu. I recommend trying another set of Senryu where each one has at least one word describing a natural phenomenon (i.e. sunlight, grass, etc.).
21st Dec 2020 7:03am
Dear S,
Thank you for this extraordinary insight and thoughtful suggestions.
While I’d intended to leave this particular set up behind I find I’m drawn to your suggestion of trying this again and incorporating something of nature and a continuous flow between the individual poems. I might be a smidge confused between senyru and haiku and their technical definitions. But that might just be semantics. Either way I’m very drawn to your idea of natural phenomenons and will begin work on another menu. Thank you very much for your read and terrific input. They are truly appreciated. H🌷
Thank you for this extraordinary insight and thoughtful suggestions.
While I’d intended to leave this particular set up behind I find I’m drawn to your suggestion of trying this again and incorporating something of nature and a continuous flow between the individual poems. I might be a smidge confused between senyru and haiku and their technical definitions. But that might just be semantics. Either way I’m very drawn to your idea of natural phenomenons and will begin work on another menu. Thank you very much for your read and terrific input. They are truly appreciated. H🌷
22nd Dec 2020 2:50pm
23rd Dec 2020 7:01am
Dear JZ,
Thank you very much for your read. Yes, K. How much time I’ve given over worrying about things over which I have no control. When all was said and done all my worry was for a whole lot of nothing. Thank you again for your read and selection.
H🌷
Thank you very much for your read. Yes, K. How much time I’ve given over worrying about things over which I have no control. When all was said and done all my worry was for a whole lot of nothing. Thank you again for your read and selection.
H🌷
27th Dec 2020 6:19pm
I liked:
(T)
Is this really it?
This is the summit of my
hard work and toil?
I think I first asked the "is this it?" question about the age of 18. The question has been driving me forward ever since --
but I always balance it with a Buddhist notion of "ask not what you have done, but rather what type of person you have become". However, if one doesn't like oneself, this can be a bit of a bummer.
So I have a third notion, which I picked up on vision-quest 20+ years ago (from the Ehama People of the Teachings of the Delicate Lodge, in the Santa Cruz mountains at the time, now in New Mexico I think). The mantra: "You get what you settle for".
All the best for 2021. Josh
(T)
Is this really it?
This is the summit of my
hard work and toil?
I think I first asked the "is this it?" question about the age of 18. The question has been driving me forward ever since --
but I always balance it with a Buddhist notion of "ask not what you have done, but rather what type of person you have become". However, if one doesn't like oneself, this can be a bit of a bummer.
So I have a third notion, which I picked up on vision-quest 20+ years ago (from the Ehama People of the Teachings of the Delicate Lodge, in the Santa Cruz mountains at the time, now in New Mexico I think). The mantra: "You get what you settle for".
All the best for 2021. Josh
28th Dec 2020 6:29am
Dear J,
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I’m going over in my mind your thoughtful response as such an incredible gift. I’ve continued to ask myself this question for nearly three decades and not once, or ever, would I have come around to the emotional and insightful conclusion you’ve provided “ You get what you settle for". I feel as though it’s just rained manna from heaven in terms of clarity for me and moving into 2021 providing strength and courage to not just settle. You are a treasure! Thank you so much for your kind, gracious and thoughtful comments. I wish you all the best in return for the coming new year. Thank you again. H🌷
Thank you for the honor of RL.
I’m going over in my mind your thoughtful response as such an incredible gift. I’ve continued to ask myself this question for nearly three decades and not once, or ever, would I have come around to the emotional and insightful conclusion you’ve provided “ You get what you settle for". I feel as though it’s just rained manna from heaven in terms of clarity for me and moving into 2021 providing strength and courage to not just settle. You are a treasure! Thank you so much for your kind, gracious and thoughtful comments. I wish you all the best in return for the coming new year. Thank you again. H🌷
9th Jan 2021 3:19pm
Thank you for such a rewarding assessment of my comment. It's the "You get what you settle for" that always gets under my skin. Every time I feel I've reached a plateau where I can "settle down", something in me brings that saying back to my consciousness and I feel a need to make an effort to go in for another round up the spiral of life. Am in such a being-shaken-up phase currently.
11th Jan 2021 10:47am
Dear J,
For reasons of my own I completely understand your phase of being-shaken-up. I’m completely untethered and I don’t particularly have an appreciation for the feeling. At all. I’ve been trying not to settle but some days I’ll take that and happily stick my head back in the sand! I wish us all better days ahead.
Xo H🌷
For reasons of my own I completely understand your phase of being-shaken-up. I’m completely untethered and I don’t particularly have an appreciation for the feeling. At all. I’ve been trying not to settle but some days I’ll take that and happily stick my head back in the sand! I wish us all better days ahead.
Xo H🌷
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17th Feb 2021 5:07am
Dear VM,
Well, you could knock me down with a feather for the powerful truth of that. Aren’t we are own worst enemy a lot of the time? Thank you for your read and for sharing that insight. I really appreciate it and your very kind compliment. H🌷
Well, you could knock me down with a feather for the powerful truth of that. Aren’t we are own worst enemy a lot of the time? Thank you for your read and for sharing that insight. I really appreciate it and your very kind compliment. H🌷
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