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Packing
wrapping treasures
in thick brown paper,
reuniting each memory
with shelf-mates
snugly resting
deep inside
their cardboard bed
I remember
it won’t be long now
before I’ll take my leave
of the only place
I ever knew the sun;
the shadows mourn,
casting long faces
where effulgence
once blinded me
with its brilliance
I grieve
at last the chill sets in,
ushered by bitter wind
that never seems
to run out of breath;
the sky weeps
sharp, icy tears
as the moon hides
ashamed
among the clouds;
I scrawl my old (new) name
in bittersweet ink
across the corrugated surface
I surrender
in thick brown paper,
reuniting each memory
with shelf-mates
snugly resting
deep inside
their cardboard bed
I remember
it won’t be long now
before I’ll take my leave
of the only place
I ever knew the sun;
the shadows mourn,
casting long faces
where effulgence
once blinded me
with its brilliance
I grieve
at last the chill sets in,
ushered by bitter wind
that never seems
to run out of breath;
the sky weeps
sharp, icy tears
as the moon hides
ashamed
among the clouds;
I scrawl my old (new) name
in bittersweet ink
across the corrugated surface
I surrender
Published 17th Nov 2020
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17th Nov 2020 12:05pm
Dear L,
Moving is bittersweet sometimes. The melancholy mist you’ve captured in this process is soulful.
Called to mind the past few moves I’ve made and each with their catalogue of memories good and not so good. That feeling of not wanting to leave behind all I’d established on my own. Beautiful write as per.
Moving is bittersweet sometimes. The melancholy mist you’ve captured in this process is soulful.
Called to mind the past few moves I’ve made and each with their catalogue of memories good and not so good. That feeling of not wanting to leave behind all I’d established on my own. Beautiful write as per.
18th Nov 2020 8:26pm
17th Nov 2020 12:23pm
Wow! ..the powerful descriptive emotions of despair in this impassioned Write is remarkable. Your final line is tremendously impactful, ''I surrender". Surrender is a metamorphosis , this submission truly resonates beyond explanation. Amazing Write!!!
18th Nov 2020 8:26pm
17th Nov 2020 2:58pm
Thank you for teaching me a new word today: effulgence
This is really heavy and thick with emotion, and moving box stuffed to the flaps is perfect metaphor for such.
This is really heavy and thick with emotion, and moving box stuffed to the flaps is perfect metaphor for such.
18th Nov 2020 8:26pm
17th Nov 2020 6:14pm
Relocation is such bitter-sweetness, Luna! It packs the pain of settled-in with the spirit of adventure into something new! As a military daughter; I knew the taste well. As an adult that taste seemed more bitter with each move until I realized the wondrous purpose of it!
Wow at my answer to you on the meditation thread before I even read this! Sending you much love, strength, and endurance throughout this emotional contrast. xo
Wow at my answer to you on the meditation thread before I even read this! Sending you much love, strength, and endurance throughout this emotional contrast. xo
18th Nov 2020 8:27pm
Thank you so much for being such a light through the transition, A. Much love xoxo 💜.
18th Nov 2020 10:33am
Something out of the BOX to read on the platform. Hope you get the metaphor.
Very well constructed. I loved your piece.
Keep it up! Emotions are tightly wrapped.
MS.
Very well constructed. I loved your piece.
Keep it up! Emotions are tightly wrapped.
MS.
18th Nov 2020 8:28pm
18th Nov 2020 5:05pm
"All those moments will be lost in time, like tears in rain." Roy Batty monologue at the end of Blade Runner. Parting is such sweet sorrow, need not be source quoted. I love how unabashed your voice is becoming, the easy confidence and intimacy with yourself, the unconcern for what it will be when translated through the prior experience bias lens of others. Awareness, control, intimacy. Beautifully rendered.
18th Nov 2020 8:25pm
