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The Veil
I wonder,
do you feel me
underneath your veil?
You're close enough to touch,
but not enough to feel.
This veil gives us a
sense of comfort,
but it is merely an illusion.
For beneath the opacity
we suffer from
loneliness &
confusion.
As much as I love you,
and want you to stay,
inevitably, I feel you
once more
slipping away
--
into the veil's
suffocating
embrace.
do you feel me
underneath your veil?
You're close enough to touch,
but not enough to feel.
This veil gives us a
sense of comfort,
but it is merely an illusion.
For beneath the opacity
we suffer from
loneliness &
confusion.
As much as I love you,
and want you to stay,
inevitably, I feel you
once more
slipping away
--
into the veil's
suffocating
embrace.
Published 8th Nov 2020
Author's Note
Written for Eerie's competition, Painting Words. The painting that I drew my inspiration from is "The Lovers II" by surrealist, René Magritte.
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8th Nov 2020 8:00pm
That's a great painting; says so much in so many different languages. This is a nice entry and I wish you the best in the competition.
9th Nov 2020 4:55am
Thank you for the kind words! For some reason, I've always been drawn to this painting... it speaks to my heart. ❤
18th Nov 2020 2:25am
"For beneath the opacity
we suffer from
loneliness &
confusion." that stanza and these lines convey so much emotion and depth. Excellent work.
Good luck in the comp.
we suffer from
loneliness &
confusion." that stanza and these lines convey so much emotion and depth. Excellent work.
Good luck in the comp.
