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No Part Of This World
I saw rain fall this morning
And I was grateful
I walked to the bathroom and turned on the water and I was grateful
I heard a scream. ran to the window a bullet laid in a women’s body
She was still alive
I was grateful
I saw a homeless man eating
I was grateful
I saw a women holding her child in the rain the baby was well covered
I was grateful
I was able to leave and not see those things anymore
I was grateful
I woke up this morning and
all I see is cornfields now
Some rabbits and maybe a few bugs
and I’m grateful
I’m sitting on my porch
Watching all that God has giving me
And I’m grateful
I live in this world but I’m no part of it.
And I was grateful
I walked to the bathroom and turned on the water and I was grateful
I heard a scream. ran to the window a bullet laid in a women’s body
She was still alive
I was grateful
I saw a homeless man eating
I was grateful
I saw a women holding her child in the rain the baby was well covered
I was grateful
I was able to leave and not see those things anymore
I was grateful
I woke up this morning and
all I see is cornfields now
Some rabbits and maybe a few bugs
and I’m grateful
I’m sitting on my porch
Watching all that God has giving me
And I’m grateful
I live in this world but I’m no part of it.
Published 29th Oct 2020
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29th Oct 2020 2:00am
29th Oct 2020 4:45am
Dear S,
Your closing line is haunting. Especially after all of your gratitudes. It was quite a twist. I appreciated it actually. For everything I’ve been given I, too, am grateful and yet I continue to ask if I can be done. Thoughtful and insightful write. I love your photo! You have a gorgeous smile. Your tshirt is a riot and what’s the name of the horse? He/she is soooo sweet. H🌷
Your closing line is haunting. Especially after all of your gratitudes. It was quite a twist. I appreciated it actually. For everything I’ve been given I, too, am grateful and yet I continue to ask if I can be done. Thoughtful and insightful write. I love your photo! You have a gorgeous smile. Your tshirt is a riot and what’s the name of the horse? He/she is soooo sweet. H🌷
Thank you for the read Dearest H
The horse name is Majestic
You said haunting?
I wrote it in relief to live in this world and be no part of the chaos is contentment, solitude
Did you not find that there?
Or did I miss understand your feedback I write and I want to know if I able to capture someone or even put them where I am?
The horse name is Majestic
You said haunting?
I wrote it in relief to live in this world and be no part of the chaos is contentment, solitude
Did you not find that there?
Or did I miss understand your feedback I write and I want to know if I able to capture someone or even put them where I am?
30th Oct 2020 3:37pm
Hi S,
Don’t mind me, I’m sure I was transferring my own feelings of living my life on the peripheral. Grateful but not engaged. Your message is very clear, my comment was not. I’m so glad you asked after that. Thank you. H🌷
Don’t mind me, I’m sure I was transferring my own feelings of living my life on the peripheral. Grateful but not engaged. Your message is very clear, my comment was not. I’m so glad you asked after that. Thank you. H🌷
29th Oct 2020 5:36pm
21st May 2022 10:04pm
Hello. I agree with Honoria, the last line is haunting. For honest feedback, I got that you live in solitude but was glad that you explained it. I thought the last line could have so many different meanings which made it haunting for me. It is an excellent poem as are all of your poems I have read.
3rd Jun 2022 3:10am
Thanks Her
Being no part of the worlf is symbolic
I dont engage in alot of things that the whole world does like holidays, politics or certain religious beliefs.
And if you was too ask if i believe in THE GOD! I woukd say yes with the biggest smilie.
Being no part of the worlf is symbolic
I dont engage in alot of things that the whole world does like holidays, politics or certain religious beliefs.
And if you was too ask if i believe in THE GOD! I woukd say yes with the biggest smilie.
