Draw me like one of your other girls

dude sounds like a pile of arseholes

...but I'd bet, the caricature is more how you feel than anything

ah, he's not a bad guy really. but it's an interesting pov for the poem, to read it as if the subject is just too self involved to see any reality, not reading signs correctly, etc. makes it a whole other poem for me, so thanks for your feedback :)

now now, there's no need for all that.. all I was trying to say was, the only person who really knows if he sees you as a caricature is him... ya get me, brav?

okay, well, thanks anyway, as you prompted me to think of it differently. i'll take that too.

EXcellent "portrait" of a "situation" (so to speak), giving breath to ambivalences/paradoxes that most folks miss the boat on, since everything's gotta be good or else it's BAD.......

Thank you :) Bad feelings just need dealt with, cos they don't really hurt anyone but yourself. Sometimes hard not to grip so tight, but when it's gone, it's gone, as they say. And that's not always the worst thing. Thanks for swinging by

very stirring read that wrenches heart & tear eyes...but the clever narartive takes it to a different level of poetic dissection .. a  logical philosophical psychoanalytic experimental tinge to it.. a post mortem so trying to be perfect .. only that finally see,s like a solace to the heart in bleed that anyways trying to show off as simple scientific lub dubb organ perhaps.. the tone is uniquely done & that what impresses me highly here.. nways am always a fan of your writes.  

caricature... in one word.. juz depicts the hyper~ brutality of that distorted satirism & a laughable discard .. that one bruises the other  as they depart from a relationship . very sharp word indeed . makes me wonder yet again how metaphors & literal & hyperboles & juxtaposings that flows in our writes as if from subconscious feltness .. enfolds so at different layers & levels..

the S3 in profoundity.. feels the deconstructive pov of the narrative, yet the immediate s4 hits right back poetic &  from the guts.. the bigger picture .. somehow I tend to connect that bigger picture to the caricature like an ironic similarity ... juz me.. & the closing is a bigger difficult truth spelt as if at such ease.. makes one to feel the biggest search & puzzle is more the self..

you are one of the poets in du that have a profound influence in me.. adoring your undeniably strong poetic voice.. shine on :) xx

You are so incredibly generous, Sumi, thank you for seeing why and where words were chosen.. there's an odd sense when a piece just feels finished and I never expect a reader to see the tiny things that make me feel I've put enough in, but you always see them and more. awesome reader eyes you have, my dear. thank you for resting them here