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THEIR WORLD AND MINE
THEIR WORLD AND MINE
My heart, don't look at those who try
to derail you from your own way.
They show you dirt and say it's fine;
they have their lives and l have mine.
The man who lives with his own soul
can't bear the mucus of a snail,
the sweat they produce on his chest,
where a clean girl would hate to rest.
Leave me alone in my pure world,
where my soul roams in its green field.
The flowers bloom, proud of their hues
to give such gorgeous, cheerful views.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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My heart, don't look at those who try
to derail you from your own way.
They show you dirt and say it's fine;
they have their lives and l have mine.
The man who lives with his own soul
can't bear the mucus of a snail,
the sweat they produce on his chest,
where a clean girl would hate to rest.
Leave me alone in my pure world,
where my soul roams in its green field.
The flowers bloom, proud of their hues
to give such gorgeous, cheerful views.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
____________________________________
Published 20th Oct 2020
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It's funny how you make apodictic claims that the things that others send to you are "dirt" but never, even when asked to do so, provide any evidence for it that shows that there's any reason to believe or accept that your evaluation has any validity.
There's also the issue that you continually avoid addressing, let alone demonstrating, namely, that your being deflected from your "way" wouldn't be a good thing and that you might actually produce something that would cause a reader to see with eyes shut if you took a different path.
There's also the issue that you continually avoid addressing, let alone demonstrating, namely, that your being deflected from your "way" wouldn't be a good thing and that you might actually produce something that would cause a reader to see with eyes shut if you took a different path.
21st Oct 2020 9:00pm
I resonate with this soulful purity of your writing here, Joseph. Peace and contentment are found within and radiate outward. Your write has a lovely syllabic lilt and is harmonious and pleasing to peruse.
21st Oct 2020 9:32pm
Thank you very much, Daniel, for the great words of yours which give me great encouragement as a poet.
8th Nov 2020 11:41am
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