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EUROPE, TO WHERE?
EUROPE, TO WHERE?
Strength, and freedom have their cost to be enjoyed.
Knights of old had practised much ere they could fight.
Where is Europe leading to through easy life?
Will it keep its culture safe and thoughts intact?
Life can't be observed in details but in acts
small and trivial, but they can explain it all.
When the theme of your verse piece is about sex,
you will have readers, and lots of those who like.
Write about marriage and kids, and none will read.
Life is made to be enjoyed and not to breed.
Who will give people to Europe and its fate?
Are they who come from abroad with their own style?
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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Strength, and freedom have their cost to be enjoyed.
Knights of old had practised much ere they could fight.
Where is Europe leading to through easy life?
Will it keep its culture safe and thoughts intact?
Life can't be observed in details but in acts
small and trivial, but they can explain it all.
When the theme of your verse piece is about sex,
you will have readers, and lots of those who like.
Write about marriage and kids, and none will read.
Life is made to be enjoyed and not to breed.
Who will give people to Europe and its fate?
Are they who come from abroad with their own style?
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
____________________________________
Published 14th Oct 2020
| Edited 15th Oct 2020
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15th Oct 2020 9:55pm
Who says the details of a life
can’t be observed?
To think it otherwise
is quite absurd
and shows that you know not
of what you speak.
And by the way,
the verbal form of “like”
is transitive**
and needs an object if
the verse in which it’s used
is to be, to a reader sans
his doing some work
he should not have to do,
the least bit comprehensible.
And then there is the fact
as Longman shows,
that “trifle” is a noun
or verb (that’s to be phrased with “with”).***
It’s not, as you suppose,
when you write, as you did,
“in acts [lo] small and trifle [oh!]
an adjective.
And shouldn’t your first line
read something like:
there is a price that must be paid
for one to have enjoyment of
the full experience
of freedom and of strength”?
Your current way of setting out
the thing that you (presumably)
desired to say
is too syntactically ill-formed
to make much sense.
**https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/like
***https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/trifle
can’t be observed?
To think it otherwise
is quite absurd
and shows that you know not
of what you speak.
And by the way,
the verbal form of “like”
is transitive**
and needs an object if
the verse in which it’s used
is to be, to a reader sans
his doing some work
he should not have to do,
the least bit comprehensible.
And then there is the fact
as Longman shows,
that “trifle” is a noun
or verb (that’s to be phrased with “with”).***
It’s not, as you suppose,
when you write, as you did,
“in acts [lo] small and trifle [oh!]
an adjective.
And shouldn’t your first line
read something like:
there is a price that must be paid
for one to have enjoyment of
the full experience
of freedom and of strength”?
Your current way of setting out
the thing that you (presumably)
desired to say
is too syntactically ill-formed
to make much sense.
**https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/like
***https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/trifle
16th Oct 2020 6:31pm
That is quite a lucid commentary on the nature of sensationalism versus truly enriching art. Well rendered Joseph.
16th Oct 2020 7:17pm
