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Jilted
Published 13th Oct 2020
| Edited 25th Oct 2020
Author's Note
Sometimes we disappoint those who we care about the most...
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“Jilted Bride” by Cary Bass-Deschenes is licensed under CC BY-SA 2.0
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“Jilted Bride” by Cary Bass-Deschenes is licensed under CC BY-SA 2.0
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13th Oct 2020 1:25pm
13th Oct 2020 1:30pm
13th Oct 2020 2:00pm
13th Oct 2020 2:06pm
Your visuals are worth the canvass for which they are always written, very beautifully composed my poet
13th Oct 2020 4:03pm
13th Oct 2020 5:35pm
It used to be called a tear-jerker...still is I suppose...visuals romantic as all git out
A touching piece of art...marred by only one little typo... Alter is change...whereas one marries at the *altar...hugs NB... Ely
A touching piece of art...marred by only one little typo... Alter is change...whereas one marries at the *altar...hugs NB... Ely
14th Oct 2020 6:09am
Sad piece but on the other hand, maybe dodged a bullet?
Though I loved that play on words "standing at the alter".
Nicely done.
Though I loved that play on words "standing at the alter".
Nicely done.
14th Oct 2020 11:40pm
17th Oct 2020 3:45am
Dear NB,
Jilted. Rejection. Unrequited. Why do we have to go through these awful experiences? Totally bites.
Your words were enough in brilliantly describing these feelings and the picture was the cherry on top. I don’t know how you found it but it works in perfect combination with your write. So we’ll done!! H🌷
Jilted. Rejection. Unrequited. Why do we have to go through these awful experiences? Totally bites.
Your words were enough in brilliantly describing these feelings and the picture was the cherry on top. I don’t know how you found it but it works in perfect combination with your write. So we’ll done!! H🌷
19th Oct 2020 10:55pm
What you said in your Author's note is a sad but heartaching truth, regardless of the circumstance that causes the disappointment.
Your poetry stretches an impressively diverse range, it says so much about your talent as a writer. 🥀
Your poetry stretches an impressively diverse range, it says so much about your talent as a writer. 🥀
Anonymous
24th Oct 2020 4:29am
owwie*
yours is a voice that speaks truth.
painful, honest write.
*hugs
yours is a voice that speaks truth.
painful, honest write.
*hugs
Very much enjoyed the thoughts and photo, as they compliment one another quite well.
H/C
I'm left wondering if another word for dressed or dress might enhance L4, e.g. adorned, attired, or possibly gown.
as it would alleviate the repetition within the line. Only suggesting since you inquired.
Still a good piece. Keep up the good work.
H/C
I'm left wondering if another word for dressed or dress might enhance L4, e.g. adorned, attired, or possibly gown.
as it would alleviate the repetition within the line. Only suggesting since you inquired.
Still a good piece. Keep up the good work.
