lost

Drone:

I like the poem but feel it should be longer.  I'll bet you have a lot more to say.  From this short poem, though, I can tell you are a good and resourceful poet.

marcella1

thank you

I can understand Lost's desire for a longer poem, and it's probably true that you could say a great deal more, but I personally like the brevity and it reads to me almost like a wise quote, a warning to people. The only trouble is I'm not sure I grasp exactly the meaning you meant to convey. Are you trying to suggest that business should be an individual venture?

i find it strange that people allow big companys to rule what is supposed to be a peoples goverment so when we allow business to become a crowd it is our Children WHO will lose