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memorabilia
when we said
our last goodbye
your eyes were
ash-gray
there were bits
of us on your lashes
our promises began
to dance like fireflies
all around us,
going heavenwards
our last kiss was
a smoke signal
and I choked on
your carbon dioxide sorries.
you closed my window
and locked my doors
and forced me to
watch my heart
burn to a cinder.
and you still have
the matchbox as
memorabilia.
our last goodbye
your eyes were
ash-gray
there were bits
of us on your lashes
our promises began
to dance like fireflies
all around us,
going heavenwards
our last kiss was
a smoke signal
and I choked on
your carbon dioxide sorries.
you closed my window
and locked my doors
and forced me to
watch my heart
burn to a cinder.
and you still have
the matchbox as
memorabilia.
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Re. memorabilia
7th Oct 2020 1:49pm
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7th Oct 2020 1:59pm
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7th Oct 2020 2:17pm
Re. memorabilia
7th Oct 2020 2:14pm
Sad but beautiful metaphors; great poem...you are so very talented. thanks for sharing. Peace. oral
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Re. memorabilia
7th Oct 2020 2:45pm
Well written , well spoken , my friend...
I am sorry if it was deeply felt , yet ,
you have rendered feeling into art !
I am sorry if it was deeply felt , yet ,
you have rendered feeling into art !
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7th Oct 2020 3:28pm
Re. memorabilia
8th Oct 2020 6:35am
Dear P,
“ and I choked on
your carbon dioxide sorries.” absolutely brilliant. The entire poem is fantastic in the sense it is so relatable. However, if this situation is current I am very very sorry. You’re write is so achingly strong and heartfelt I greatly appreciated it in a similar sense and experience. To better days. H🌷
“ and I choked on
your carbon dioxide sorries.” absolutely brilliant. The entire poem is fantastic in the sense it is so relatable. However, if this situation is current I am very very sorry. You’re write is so achingly strong and heartfelt I greatly appreciated it in a similar sense and experience. To better days. H🌷
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Re. memorabilia
30th Nov 2020 2:10am
The vignettes you cause to play in minds are beyond magnificent ... Bless and love ... ..
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