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The Collector
carefully wrapped in paper,
he always gives his best;
tied up tight with fancy bows,
displayed with all the rest
the prettier the package,
the easier the prey;
girls are easily flattered,
by gazes that betray
he gifts them with his poison,
his words are silk and wine;
when heavy eyes glaze over,
he plucks them from the vine
he always gives his best;
tied up tight with fancy bows,
displayed with all the rest
the prettier the package,
the easier the prey;
girls are easily flattered,
by gazes that betray
he gifts them with his poison,
his words are silk and wine;
when heavy eyes glaze over,
he plucks them from the vine
Published 3rd Oct 2020
Author's Note
Written for “The Living Are Just the Dead on Holiday” competition
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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3rd Oct 2020 9:52pm
3rd Oct 2020 10:10pm
3rd Oct 2020 10:34pm
Wow, wow, wow! I absolutely loved this, Luna ❤️. It's clever, and speaks elegantly on the fact that looks can be deceiving... Beware of those, collectors of souls - they'll leave a little piece of your heart when they go. Great stuff... And it flowed beautifully!
3rd Oct 2020 11:11pm
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4th Oct 2020 2:54am
4th Oct 2020 6:58am
Dear L,
This describes most of the schmucks I’ve ever had a crush on. 😏
The underlying sinister feel of suspense and fear is so well penned. I don’t suppose you’d ever consider teaching a poetry writing course? What I found so awesome was the delicate
words creating the piece were the same words that were so scary.
Genius. All the best for this comp.
H🌷
This describes most of the schmucks I’ve ever had a crush on. 😏
The underlying sinister feel of suspense and fear is so well penned. I don’t suppose you’d ever consider teaching a poetry writing course? What I found so awesome was the delicate
words creating the piece were the same words that were so scary.
Genius. All the best for this comp.
H🌷
4th Oct 2020 7:35am
You and me both lol 🙄. I’ve always loved creepy stories told in an almost innocent way. They tend to stick with me. Thank you so much 💜
6th Oct 2020 00:33am
Eek ... reminds me of an old thriller titled "The Collector" I saw like 40.years ago. Great to read this as Halloween is approaching!
6th Oct 2020 00:55am
6th Oct 2020 8:29pm
6th Oct 2020 10:58pm
7th Nov 2020 1:18am
Loved that closing stanza, it's so pretty and dark all at the same time.
Well done. Good luck in the comp.
Well done. Good luck in the comp.
7th Nov 2020 1:35am
12th Nov 2020 4:16pm
Congratulations on your win
Well deserved this is a splendid fitting piece
Well deserved this is a splendid fitting piece
12th Nov 2020 4:33pm
You are an incredibly gracious and compassionate human, Val. Thank you so much and congratulations to you as well. I always love your words, but I especially loved them in this comp 💜.
