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PRESENCE
Being connected
to you this way
is equal parts
frustration / liberation
We exalt without
having ever seen
felt tasted smelled
each other
to you this way
is equal parts
frustration / liberation
We exalt without
having ever seen
felt tasted smelled
each other
Published 29th Sep 2020
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29th Sep 2020 6:21pm
29th Sep 2020 6:30pm
I think the "felt tasted smelled" is overrated ( though I also think you should change the wording to "smelt" ).
Can't say I agree about the equal either. But hey, it's a poem that challenges the reader to think and THAT is always a good thing.
Can't say I agree about the equal either. But hey, it's a poem that challenges the reader to think and THAT is always a good thing.
29th Sep 2020 10:11pm
29th Sep 2020 10:12pm
29th Sep 2020 11:39pm
30th Sep 2020 7:08am
