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O u c h.
You have been s l e e pless
for days
Today is Sunday
She is
-thirty
-a divorcee
-poor
and
r e a d y
for the next step
in your l o v e
where things disappeared
clothes-distance-shame
and were replaced by
libido-leather-lust
c-l-i-c-k
and you
s
l
i
d
e
(into) your
rabbit-hole
The olive green
of your (inbox)
excites you
and in
y o u r
momentous desperation
you c-l-i-c-k
gulp the private message
with blood travelling
at the speed of thought
and again
on the 'view me' option
r e a d y
to take
your role
of a voyeur
an opportunist-
a loner-oppresor
a lover
from the richer nation
with more
GDP
scope
growth
power
and
y
o
u
w a i t
your credit card
handy-in your reach
just
in case
next to the tube of lube
KY Jelly it r e a d s
Y
o
u
w a i t
some-more
may be you want
a smile-some skin
then some more
heat-tit-clit
rub around the nub
may be more
wishful thinking
and-then
a giant hard-on
bursting out
of a denim
barely
there
w
e
l
c
o
m
e
s
y o u
w
i
t
h
a middle finger
You close the window
and breathe and try to
have the facts ready
for the next tryst
You regain your
composure
go back-search-smile
moving in a little
c l o s e r.
Published 28th Jan 2012
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28th Jan 2012 11:54pm
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28th Jan 2012 11:57pm
V
Yes-that's a key aspect.
But then they are unrelenting.
Give up never.:)
Thank you,
S'
Yes-that's a key aspect.
But then they are unrelenting.
Give up never.:)
Thank you,
S'
29th Jan 2012 9:06pm
30th Jan 2012 6:21am
Firebyrd
That's very kind of you.
Thank you for stopping by.
Elated that you enjoyed,
S'
That's very kind of you.
Thank you for stopping by.
Elated that you enjoyed,
S'
Anonymous
2nd Feb 2012 2:07pm
This is wonderful...minimalist and the use of playing with the layout of the words and letters is EXTREMELY EFFECTIVE...write more..please!
2nd Feb 2012 11:02pm
Somelikeithot
Thank you for stopping by.
Glad it worked for you.
Will do.:)
S'
Thank you for stopping by.
Glad it worked for you.
Will do.:)
S'
4th Feb 2012 2:21am
The way you play with words and spacing in your poetry is so intriguing. I love how the actions fit the words meaning. "Slide" is my favorite ... It's like onomatopoeia on the page! (I'm sure there's a word for that). I also really enjoy your tidbits of ultra-specific details: "the olive green of your inbox" ... genius!
4th Feb 2012 2:25am
Oh, and if you don't mind, I may try to write a poem in similar fashion. Consider yourself my inspiration! :)
4th Feb 2012 8:04am
Meghan
Welcome to DUP. :)
I am glad that you stopped by.
You have been very generous in
your feedback. Onomatopoeia seems
to be of a league of jargons I am
not currently familiar with. Will
get back.
Glad you enjoyed the read.
Light,
S'
Welcome to DUP. :)
I am glad that you stopped by.
You have been very generous in
your feedback. Onomatopoeia seems
to be of a league of jargons I am
not currently familiar with. Will
get back.
Glad you enjoyed the read.
Light,
S'
4th Feb 2012 8:05am
8th Feb 2012 1:43pm
13th Feb 2012 3:50am
Hey its Slumbeauty9
not slumneauty9...
:)
:)
I am too glad to read your piece.
will continue..
not slumneauty9...
:)
:)
I am too glad to read your piece.
will continue..
13th Feb 2012 7:47am
Dear poetess
Sincerest apologies.
It was an honest typographical error.
The proximity of n and b and my fickle
fingers must have resulted in it.
Thank you again for stopping by and
showing the faith.
Curtsy,
Sumeet
Sincerest apologies.
It was an honest typographical error.
The proximity of n and b and my fickle
fingers must have resulted in it.
Thank you again for stopping by and
showing the faith.
Curtsy,
Sumeet
13th Feb 2012 12:21pm
26th Feb 2012 7:28am
Particularly enjoyed the visual aspect of your poem haha. It fit rather well with the underlying connection to technology.
7th Mar 2012 12:08pm
