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Caught
There is a deer here
.....veers from the head lamps
And shoots his sweltering skin
He slows
And feels alive
His chest heaves
The onslaught of branches
A rocking chair
he is swaddled by the darkness
.....has shed the light
.....veers from the head lamps
And shoots his sweltering skin
He slows
And feels alive
His chest heaves
The onslaught of branches
A rocking chair
he is swaddled by the darkness
.....has shed the light
Published 18th Sep 2020
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This is an interesting take on anxiety. It’s dark and then heart pounding and then calm. You’ve packed a gauntlet of emotions into very few words.
Thoroughly enjoyed.
This piece has been nominated for the New Member of the Month competition.
Thoroughly enjoyed.
This piece has been nominated for the New Member of the Month competition.
18th Sep 2020 3:10pm
Oh Eerie, seriously honored... but I have been around a long, long time.
Thank you so much for your cool comment
Thank you so much for your cool comment
18th Sep 2020 4:27pm
Well, Calamityofgin has only been here for four months, so as long as no one takes issue and you don’t mind, the nomination will stand ☺️
18th Sep 2020 7:04pm
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24th Sep 2020 4:20am
Grand anxiety metaphor of a deer on the run caught in the light only to find peace. Truly you write poetry like a woman sure of her talent and ready to make art. You poems are the dawn for my earth.
Love ya,
John
Love ya,
John
28th Sep 2020 5:59pm
I really liked the way you portrayed this, especially there at the end as feeling hopeless enveloped by the dark.
Excellent write.
Excellent write.
