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Aviation
( After Alice Fulton )
I once had reason to fear
humans in general—
people are people, individual
as their unpredictable demeanor
regardless of upbringing
I've experienced them
in farmhouse pigsties
to Buckingham Palace—
often unable to tell a difference
aside from clothes or conduct.
I once observed various groups
in a museum:
The elite, social ladies
with diamonds and emeralds
capturing the light from paintings;
shining status symbols, sailing
in an ocean of titanium white teeth—
ornately framed islands of color
drowning in dirty martinis
and stoles of long-dead mink.
The middle-class, parents
their children in tow, controlled
mannerisms dictated by rules—
deep furrows across their brow:
college tuition, savings, glasses, braces—
societal expectations outweighing relaxation.
The elderly, taking their time
sipping beauty as though holy water
offered during a drought
from a golden goblet—
threadbare raiment veiling skin
cracked by elements; their faces
angelic in appreciation: Michelangelo
Matisse, Chagall, Van Gogh.
The lonely, solo navigators
circling some dreamy landscape
of harvested wheat, or starry night
over a provincial café
Forlorn eyes having dissolved
into brush strokes of cobalt blue
yellow ochre, resurrected cadmium hues—
memories of unrequited love
relived over and over in a heart
unwilling to let go.
Then, her—
there, red coat over sensible shoes;
a second-hand bag, draped
across an upright shoulder, simple
updo complimenting high cheekbones
lightly touched with rouge. Her eyes
shimmering greater than emeralds
off-set by diamonds, having survived
loneliness alone, she now eschews
the in-crowd with a polite nod, drifting
chin up—a compassionate zephyr
gliding about the gallery as fresh air
for those who couldn't breathe.
I innately knew, at age eight
she was exactly who I wanted to emulate—
and I, shy and insecure, smiled regardless
when she playfully navigated about me
and winked.
~
I once had reason to fear
humans in general—
people are people, individual
as their unpredictable demeanor
regardless of upbringing
I've experienced them
in farmhouse pigsties
to Buckingham Palace—
often unable to tell a difference
aside from clothes or conduct.
I once observed various groups
in a museum:
The elite, social ladies
with diamonds and emeralds
capturing the light from paintings;
shining status symbols, sailing
in an ocean of titanium white teeth—
ornately framed islands of color
drowning in dirty martinis
and stoles of long-dead mink.
The middle-class, parents
their children in tow, controlled
mannerisms dictated by rules—
deep furrows across their brow:
college tuition, savings, glasses, braces—
societal expectations outweighing relaxation.
The elderly, taking their time
sipping beauty as though holy water
offered during a drought
from a golden goblet—
threadbare raiment veiling skin
cracked by elements; their faces
angelic in appreciation: Michelangelo
Matisse, Chagall, Van Gogh.
The lonely, solo navigators
circling some dreamy landscape
of harvested wheat, or starry night
over a provincial café
Forlorn eyes having dissolved
into brush strokes of cobalt blue
yellow ochre, resurrected cadmium hues—
memories of unrequited love
relived over and over in a heart
unwilling to let go.
Then, her—
there, red coat over sensible shoes;
a second-hand bag, draped
across an upright shoulder, simple
updo complimenting high cheekbones
lightly touched with rouge. Her eyes
shimmering greater than emeralds
off-set by diamonds, having survived
loneliness alone, she now eschews
the in-crowd with a polite nod, drifting
chin up—a compassionate zephyr
gliding about the gallery as fresh air
for those who couldn't breathe.
I innately knew, at age eight
she was exactly who I wanted to emulate—
and I, shy and insecure, smiled regardless
when she playfully navigated about me
and winked.
~
Written by
Ahavati
(Tams)
Published 6th Sep 2020
Author's Note
Inspirational Poem: "Aviation" https://www.poetryfoundation.org/poetrymagazine/browse?volume=143&issue=4&page=23
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Re. Aviation
6th Sep 2020 10:15pm
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7th Sep 2020 12:15pm
Re. Aviation
6th Sep 2020 10:55pm
Beautiful magical flow
The imagery was like sitting back and watching an old reel tape, absolutely stunning
Your word choice placed me right in your pocket of emotions
Excellent vibes off this one
The imagery was like sitting back and watching an old reel tape, absolutely stunning
Your word choice placed me right in your pocket of emotions
Excellent vibes off this one
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Re: Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 12:16pm
Thank you, Val. I loved your perception of this because it was exactly that in my mind. Namaste, my friend. xo
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Anonymous
6th Sep 2020 11:18pm
While I enjoyed aspects of Fulton's "Aviation"
"up North where windows ignite early" ---- whew!
I found hers to be less ... cohesive.
Yours, upon finishing, immediately left me with the impression of a single word:
contrast
Well done!
❤📝
"up North where windows ignite early" ---- whew!
I found hers to be less ... cohesive.
Yours, upon finishing, immediately left me with the impression of a single word:
contrast
Well done!
❤📝
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I am rather surprised by that. Aviation is one of my favorites of hers because it aligns so well with my philosophy of not giving a dang whether or not the rat-race feels I am worthy to be a part of the maze. ( But I'm speaking essence, not technicalities. )
No thanks.
Fulton envies the beauty in dedicating one's life to the task of furnishing others with something that enables them to make an honest living. I have always felt to be completely oneself despite societal expectations is the greatest gift one could provide humanity. And certainly enables them to be themselves in the secure presence of that empowering environment.
If you love something society acts above, do it with such passion that they feel the energy in the laces they tie, and every step they walk back to you for more. Because, hey, you're the best.
It's been 42 years, and I have never forgotten her, nor her energetic gift.
Thank you. ❤
I haven't forgotten about yours; I need to rest after catching my breath and respond. And STILL need to do a Yeats entry! Boy this month!
No thanks.
Fulton envies the beauty in dedicating one's life to the task of furnishing others with something that enables them to make an honest living. I have always felt to be completely oneself despite societal expectations is the greatest gift one could provide humanity. And certainly enables them to be themselves in the secure presence of that empowering environment.
If you love something society acts above, do it with such passion that they feel the energy in the laces they tie, and every step they walk back to you for more. Because, hey, you're the best.
It's been 42 years, and I have never forgotten her, nor her energetic gift.
Thank you. ❤
I haven't forgotten about yours; I need to rest after catching my breath and respond. And STILL need to do a Yeats entry! Boy this month!
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Anonymous
6th Sep 2020 11:39pm
No worries bout mine. 😊 I knows you've got a lot going on. ❤
In all honesty, I need to reread Fulton's when I have a better focus ( less distractions ), but I whole-heartedly agree. Being your true self is the best gift you can give to everyone you come into contact with, whether they appreciate it or not.
In all honesty, I need to reread Fulton's when I have a better focus ( less distractions ), but I whole-heartedly agree. Being your true self is the best gift you can give to everyone you come into contact with, whether they appreciate it or not.
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Anonymous
- Edited 7th Sep 2020 11:54am
7th Sep 2020 11:53am
LOL Okay, so I missed the end of Fulton's poem on Poetry Foundation when I turned the page and somehow ended up with just that magazine cover image instead.
Now her poem makes more sense to me, as I can see how it is presented in a stream of consciousness format, and the final stanza hammers home the emphasis on personal passions that others may not be thrilled by or see the point of.
❤📝
Now her poem makes more sense to me, as I can see how it is presented in a stream of consciousness format, and the final stanza hammers home the emphasis on personal passions that others may not be thrilled by or see the point of.
❤📝
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Re: Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 12:15pm
LOL! I wondered! I probably should've selected a more readable format, as many may not know to turn the page; however, what's done is done! Fulton has an excellent command of symbolism and metaphor she demonstrates in her works, as well as a depth I find both intriguing and magnetic.
Re. Aviation
6th Sep 2020 11:27pm
"The middle-class, parents
their children in tow, controlled
mannerisms dictated by rules—
deep furrows across their brow:
college tuition, savings, glasses, braces—
societal expectations outweighing relaxation."
These two stanzas, wow. So relatable. Most particularly, "societal expectations outweighing relaxation". There were a lot of rules to remember, mostly things I was not to say or ask for.
I really enjoyed reading this.
their children in tow, controlled
mannerisms dictated by rules—
deep furrows across their brow:
college tuition, savings, glasses, braces—
societal expectations outweighing relaxation."
These two stanzas, wow. So relatable. Most particularly, "societal expectations outweighing relaxation". There were a lot of rules to remember, mostly things I was not to say or ask for.
I really enjoyed reading this.
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Re: Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 12:18pm
Thank you, Eerie! Unless your coffers are a gold mine, raising children can take its toll. I am happy that message came through as solidly as it did.
Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 00:01am
Well my wonderful friend...as any practicing Existential Nihilist will tell you, living an "authentic life" is really the only way to live...I must admit to be a little ignorant in regards to, Alice and her work...but have very rarely cared as to what others think of me...as Nietzsche wrote...""Giving style" to one's character...is exercised by those who see all the strengths and weaknesses of their own natures and then comprehend them as an artistic plan...Here the ugly which could not have been removed is hidden; there it has been reinterpreted and made sublime...For one thing is needful: that a human being attain satisfaction with themself."
Such a sublime piece of poetry, D.
Peace...Harry
Such a sublime piece of poetry, D.
Peace...Harry
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Re: Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 12:20pm
Indeed, my friend. Indeed.
Thank you for such a wonderful analysis, Harry, It's much appreciated, as is your presence.
Thank you for such a wonderful analysis, Harry, It's much appreciated, as is your presence.
Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 00:24am
my only problem with all that
"to thy own self be true" stuff is: what if "thy own self" is a pig ..
but the imagery and poetry is beautiful
"to thy own self be true" stuff is: what if "thy own self" is a pig ..
but the imagery and poetry is beautiful
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Re: Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 12:22pm
LOL! Only you, Paul! Though you are very correct in that assessment. Take a sociopath or narcissist, for example. . .
Thank you so much; you know it's greatly appreciated, my friend.
Thank you so much; you know it's greatly appreciated, my friend.
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MEN are pigs.
Society is becoming more matriarchal, which is great, except for needing to play the Men's game" to get there. Women are better politicians,
better physicians, better counselors, better lawyers, better police....& etc.
I've said it before, & i'm in no way ashamed to say, if i was born female, i would be Lesbian.
Society is becoming more matriarchal, which is great, except for needing to play the Men's game" to get there. Women are better politicians,
better physicians, better counselors, better lawyers, better police....& etc.
I've said it before, & i'm in no way ashamed to say, if i was born female, i would be Lesbian.
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Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 9:43am
Dear A,
While I know there is a lot more going on here this poem immediately brought back so many memories of family trips to visit historical sites and museums such as the situation described in your write. Unfortunately for me, I was not at all astute enough to discern the red coated sensible shoe wearing heroine vs the bejeweled society ladies emulating some of the master works we were supposed to be appreciating. I would have been part of the enormous groups of middle class families amongst an enormous family in itself trying to balance between following all the rules of proper behavior and extreme boredom. What I find so incredible in this write is aside from the self assured red coat lady- she’s fantastic, also, “ people are people, individual
as their unpredictable demeanor
regardless of upbringing” . To me that is the touchstone of the work. So powerful and meaningful it’s simply stated format. Wonderful write. H🌷
While I know there is a lot more going on here this poem immediately brought back so many memories of family trips to visit historical sites and museums such as the situation described in your write. Unfortunately for me, I was not at all astute enough to discern the red coated sensible shoe wearing heroine vs the bejeweled society ladies emulating some of the master works we were supposed to be appreciating. I would have been part of the enormous groups of middle class families amongst an enormous family in itself trying to balance between following all the rules of proper behavior and extreme boredom. What I find so incredible in this write is aside from the self assured red coat lady- she’s fantastic, also, “ people are people, individual
as their unpredictable demeanor
regardless of upbringing” . To me that is the touchstone of the work. So powerful and meaningful it’s simply stated format. Wonderful write. H🌷
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Re: Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 12:25pm
Thank you, Honoria. I think I always felt out of place; therefore, was continually searching the horizon for some sign of what I would consider recognized normality. I have met quite a few people in my time who projected such an energy of light and love, I have yet to forget them regardless of how old I grow. And though the interludes were brief, their impact was lasting.
Thank you again, your comment is greatly appreciated.
Thank you again, your comment is greatly appreciated.
Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 12:45pm
^This. 8 year olds carry a heavy & curious light. Particularly loved the museum stanzas. And I must ask? Buckingham Palace?? Rob
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Thank you, Rob. They do, don't they? And, yes; Buckingham Palace - Summer, 1968.
Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 5:33pm
I kind of want to crawl inside this poem and live. I’m not sure if that makes sense, but it’s what I feel. Well done, A. Well done.
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7th Sep 2020 5:34pm
Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 6:02pm
you flow so at magical ease & inimitable metaphorical diction .. of the scene at lenght & wide.. diggibg beneath the layers & the striking emotions & the rising anticipations & hopes & the light out of it all... totally a gripping read & the tribute... ahh of late getting interested in classic corners & the poets .., you & JB hav always beenn & ever doing a meticulous noble job in these comps & the poetry , wisdom you share through them . Will try to be part of your CC as much as possible A.. learning from you & classiks . Light & Love Ev xx
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Re: Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 6:07pm
That will be so excited to have you join us in the CCC, Uma! I am sure your entries will be fabulous! If possible, please vote in the latest poll ( speakeasy ) in regards to who we'll feature next month. Also, suggest a poet/s that you would like to see featured as well.
Thank you for the lovely analysis, Uma. I truly appreciate your perspective and always enjoy your comments in a deeply spiritual sense.
Namaste, my Dear Friend. xo
Thank you for the lovely analysis, Uma. I truly appreciate your perspective and always enjoy your comments in a deeply spiritual sense.
Namaste, my Dear Friend. xo
Re: Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 6:12pm
Have already voted!:) Tagore & Joyce Carol Oates.. Aww Its okay I hope to reveal the choices here;) Will sure suggest Poet/s in poll thread. <3 xx
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Re: Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 6:13pm
Fabulous! Tagore was my choice too! We need to nominate more Eastern poets! Sufis and mystics!
XO
XO
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7th Sep 2020 6:21pm
Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 9:21pm
for some reason I cannot stop thinking about this write. has more depth than I care to admit. am going to nominate it.
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7th Sep 2020 10:33pm
Re. Aviation
7th Sep 2020 11:23pm
This was absolutely delightful to read; I found myself completely immersed in the imagery and the contrasts between the visitors. It was like reading a novel about the layers of expectations that we are comprised of, all within the succinct stanzas of perfectly chosen words. This is really amazing, Ahavati. Rather brilliant. XOXO
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8th Sep 2020 12:57pm
Re. Aviation
8th Sep 2020 1:29am
This is really intriguing...
Very engaging...
I agree with Luna, I too was immersed deep in it
Such a splendid spill
Very engaging...
I agree with Luna, I too was immersed deep in it
Such a splendid spill
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Re: Re. Aviation
8th Sep 2020 12:58pm
Thank you so much, Poet! I really appreciate it.
Namaste and blessed week, Friend. ❤
Namaste and blessed week, Friend. ❤
Re. Aviation
8th Sep 2020 8:28am
Acute (as per cute ?) observitivity!
I languor (these horrid days)
in thy poignant shadow., m'dear.
I languor (these horrid days)
in thy poignant shadow., m'dear.
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8th Sep 2020 12:58pm
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9th Sep 2020 2:17am
not as much as i should be.
if i was 170 instead of 200, i'd probably live a few months longer, but it seems to be more trouble than it's worth.
o well....
if i was 170 instead of 200, i'd probably live a few months longer, but it seems to be more trouble than it's worth.
o well....
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Re: Re. Aviation
9th Sep 2020 2:18am
You seem to be doing just fine to me, Dan'O!
Sending you much love and strength, friend!
Sending you much love and strength, friend!
Re: Re. Aviation
9th Sep 2020 2:27am
HA....yeah, right......3+months in hospital this year. Good shape, indeed.
But i love ye for sayin' so.
But i love ye for sayin' so.
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Re: Re. Aviation
9th Sep 2020 2:28am
I was referring to you being alive against ALL ODDS! You're a miracle! Are you certain Mother Mary is not outlined in your chest hairs? How about Elvis?
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22nd Sep 2020 5:57am
I remember being young and searching for role models. I also remember art museums, the descriptiveness of this was so dense in your poem, like in Alice Fultons. I've been reading her poems, I like them so far and I'm working on something. I'm finding her easier to comprehend than Yeats, actually. With her, each poem is its own tale, as opposed to Yeats where each poem is seemingly a puzzle piece of him as a man in story and philosophy.
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22nd Sep 2020 1:09pm
Thank you, PR. And I feel the EXACT same way about Fulton. Many great poets, such as Oliver, seem to have themes ( nature ), which equate to their audience as a whole embodiment of work. However, as you have noted with Fulton, her poetry can stand on its individual merit ( not that others such as Oliver's couldn't ). But there's something unique about Fulton; she captures a dimension of something in her poems and almost sets it aside from herself, as though she is an observer ( a very empathic one ) vs being an actual puzzle piece as Keats.
I've been anxiously awaiting your entry!
I've been anxiously awaiting your entry!
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Anonymous
- Edited 19th Oct 2020 2:48am
19th Oct 2020 2:47am
You rendered her so lovely that I can see you both in a painting of your own. Surely you made her day and she carried you far in memory as well. A poem worthy of its own exhibition.❤
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