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Still
You left me
alone
with no one to
listen
with no one to
understand
what it's about to be
us.
i go on
alone
mostly
still talking to
you
still mourning
you.
alone
with no one to
listen
with no one to
understand
what it's about to be
us.
i go on
alone
mostly
still talking to
you
still mourning
you.
Published 26th Jan 2012
| Edited 10th Nov 2016
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4th Mar 2012 00:29am
While there are many "why did you break up with me" poems about, this one has a few special characteristics. You don't belabor the poem with excess self-pity or length. There are a couple of interesting phrases in "no one to understand what it's about to be us" and in "still talking to you." Also there is the title. I like titles that add a little information to the poem. I also like parenthetical titles that imply there is a real world continuing outside of the poem. This gives us both. Thumbs up.
4th Mar 2012 5:39pm
Ah, yes that's a different type of leaving. I didn't take the mourning literally enough. It make sense, I just assumed it was a euphemism. Sorry to hear.
30th May 2012 4:05am
How did you know about my life? You have said so very much in so few, well used, words.
