Minimalism

O

The empress of minimalism.

This poem reminds of black holes.

Where a sqaure centimetre could
outweigh several planets.

The last line is profound. It
arrests the gaze and then there
is a 'silence'.

Curtsy,

S'

Thank you for stopping by :)

Ahh yes, a truly huge statement in so few words.

Deeply personal yet easily rellatable.

Bravo !

-ps just a thought , in order to get the full effect of "and I " it might be an idea to give it its own line .

Shine on !  

you're absolutely right about it!
I'll change it right away.
thank you for stopping by and dropping such an encouraging feedback.

I agree.
I understand your darkness.
The feeling of loneliness.
It is common to all human beings.
But only the most sensitive, understand the sense of lossiness.

I would read more often your verses.

im sure you understand :)

I must say that your thoughts have been there in literature before but not as good as you have penned them...

I don't deserve such credit. thank you though :)

(at us at least), beautiful, dark, powerful, and a little bit disturbing

true. thank you for the comment matthew :)

To watch everyone around you leave or die...the definition of true loneliness. Sad, yet powerful piece, said in so few words. Great job.

we've all been through a lot. Being able to relate with one another's experiences makes solitude more liveable.
thank you for your kind feedback :)

minimized, subdued, simple but powerful and deep :)

i like this one
i  wish id written it

kalo paska

an honour to receive such a comment from you, DU's king of short and intense poetry.

Kalo pasxa ki se sena.