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Spiraling
That spiraling feeling
Still burns in my brain
Lock me in my closet
Make me feel my pain
The pain of a love lost
Right before my eyes
One minute it was there
The next it had died
The sadness didn't creep
It engulfed my every thought
Till I numbed myself with drink and pills
Until I got caught
I don't think things
Could get any worse
I'm starting to feel
Like I may have been cursed
Still burns in my brain
Lock me in my closet
Make me feel my pain
The pain of a love lost
Right before my eyes
One minute it was there
The next it had died
The sadness didn't creep
It engulfed my every thought
Till I numbed myself with drink and pills
Until I got caught
I don't think things
Could get any worse
I'm starting to feel
Like I may have been cursed
Published 1st Aug 2020
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17th Aug 2020 10:46pm
Dear K,
You write very well the feelings of angst and sadness. Your gentle rhyming works well amidst such a serious subject. “ The sadness didn't creep
It engulfed my every thought ” excellent description of all this will happen and how it takes over.
Well written. H🌷
You write very well the feelings of angst and sadness. Your gentle rhyming works well amidst such a serious subject. “ The sadness didn't creep
It engulfed my every thought ” excellent description of all this will happen and how it takes over.
Well written. H🌷
17th Aug 2020 11:45pm
