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Odette
Gold gilt mirrors
and lots of art
silky robes,
beaded scarfs
rubys and emeralds
graced her hands
at her feet layed half a man,
he wept and sobbed
made a mess on the floor
she got up, she couldn't
take the noise anymore,
he reached for her as she left
and that was the last time
he would see his dear, sweet, Odette.
She didn't go out the door,
it was the window.
and lots of art
silky robes,
beaded scarfs
rubys and emeralds
graced her hands
at her feet layed half a man,
he wept and sobbed
made a mess on the floor
she got up, she couldn't
take the noise anymore,
he reached for her as she left
and that was the last time
he would see his dear, sweet, Odette.
She didn't go out the door,
it was the window.
Published 21st Jul 2020
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21st Jul 2020 8:04am
21st Jul 2020 12:02pm
21st Jul 2020 9:22am
Priceless! Just priceless! Went straight to my RL. I especially love your ending! It was a big surprise!
21st Jul 2020 12:02pm
21st Jul 2020 12:18pm
Dear N,
Odette. A complicated character. She drowns in Swan Lake but her ending here is much swifter. I loved the twist at the end. I’ve read this several times and each time it made me think no matter how much beauty and wealth you posses inner harmony is the key. I love your thoughtful poems, and your photo’s should be exhibited in the national art gallery. H🌷
Odette. A complicated character. She drowns in Swan Lake but her ending here is much swifter. I loved the twist at the end. I’ve read this several times and each time it made me think no matter how much beauty and wealth you posses inner harmony is the key. I love your thoughtful poems, and your photo’s should be exhibited in the national art gallery. H🌷
21st Jul 2020 12:25pm
Thank you for the awesome compliment and support ❤❤❤
I totally forgot about swan lake and Odette, funny thing is I was gonna title this swan dive. Lol so in my mind I had correlated the two somehow. Memory can be weird.
I totally forgot about swan lake and Odette, funny thing is I was gonna title this swan dive. Lol so in my mind I had correlated the two somehow. Memory can be weird.
21st Jul 2020 1:05pm
Sadness and mystery, what a mix.... why was he so prostrate and why the dramatic exit? Very thought provoking N. As usual, super write... ❤️🌹🌹
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22nd Jul 2020 6:41pm
Beautifully metaphoric, Nikki. The imagery was stunning and the poem simply flowed as water.
22nd Jul 2020 11:56pm
8th Aug 2020 3:35am
8th Aug 2020 3:42am
😘😘 Loki.
Dude..I always wondered, do you call me Scheherazade because you had seen that my b-day is 10-01? Lol idk ive thought about it recently.
Dude..I always wondered, do you call me Scheherazade because you had seen that my b-day is 10-01? Lol idk ive thought about it recently.
8th Aug 2020 7:18am
Aw damn I wish I was that cool. I never scoped your specs close enough to see... and prolly woulda missed the obvious. But the 1,001 Arabian Tales yes very much.
In my mind I always thought the mistress's real talent was holding suspense. She kept herself alive by it, while sloooowly securing the mind of the Sultan.
You drop it hot on the everyday or the overlooked, and turn it suspenseful. Without running out of content. Hence: nikkimoe feels like Scheherazade.
Damn. 10-01. Collective Soul: December or maybe Counting Crows: Long December resonate with the side of you chosen to be revealed in your work
In my mind I always thought the mistress's real talent was holding suspense. She kept herself alive by it, while sloooowly securing the mind of the Sultan.
You drop it hot on the everyday or the overlooked, and turn it suspenseful. Without running out of content. Hence: nikkimoe feels like Scheherazade.
Damn. 10-01. Collective Soul: December or maybe Counting Crows: Long December resonate with the side of you chosen to be revealed in your work
