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TREASURES
she was full of lies and secrets
and all the half truths that keep us
on the right track
there were tears, a few stories,
but most everyone who truly loved her
had gone before,
paving the way to nowhere
leaving every stone unturned
as the grass rooted in the red earth
her treasures flew like wrens,
scattered,
nesting in corners,
waiting for the next go 'round
and all the half truths that keep us
on the right track
there were tears, a few stories,
but most everyone who truly loved her
had gone before,
paving the way to nowhere
leaving every stone unturned
as the grass rooted in the red earth
her treasures flew like wrens,
scattered,
nesting in corners,
waiting for the next go 'round
Published 14th Jul 2020
Author's Note
Maybe we keep death a mystery because we can't face what we really know. We want to believe we'll somehow carry on, but deep down recognize the improbability. Regardless, those things we call our own in life -- things that often define who we are -- are no longer ours in death (i.e. you can't take it with you).
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14th Jul 2020 3:36pm
14th Jul 2020 5:05pm
14th Jul 2020 8:12pm
Death, the great mystery. The only certainty we have is yesterday and death...everything else is just hope (and faith if you’ve got it). Another excellent write J.🌹🌹
14th Jul 2020 11:50pm
18th Jul 2020 2:08am
I would be thrilled if you would send an audio reading of this to the site's podcast, The Poetcast Project. I think people would benefit from hearing this and the feature may draw interest to your writing on site. If you would be interested, please send an mp3 or mp4, including your screen name and the poem's title, to:
undergroundoutloud@outlook.com
Member participation is the life's blood of the podcast, so I hope you will consider it.
In kindness,
Daniel
undergroundoutloud@outlook.com
Member participation is the life's blood of the podcast, so I hope you will consider it.
In kindness,
Daniel
18th Jul 2020 3:23pm
Thanks so much for your interest in my poem.
I have tried recording myself reading my poetry and hated the way it sounded, making me think my poetry is better left on the page. I wish I could make it sound like I hear it in my head, or as fantastic as some of the spoken word I've heard.
But thank you again.
Truly honored.
J.
I have tried recording myself reading my poetry and hated the way it sounded, making me think my poetry is better left on the page. I wish I could make it sound like I hear it in my head, or as fantastic as some of the spoken word I've heard.
But thank you again.
Truly honored.
J.
19th Jul 2020 00:37am
I understand. If you'd like to participate, I can assign a reader to recite your poem, with full credit given to you.
19th Jul 2020 12:43pm
19th Jul 2020 9:59pm
Dear J,
This piece is intoxicating. I got to thinking about the end and realized I’m only to be remembered by those who kept me close. And when they go I become an anonymous traveller passing through. Great write with so many nooks and crannies to make you think.
H🌷
This piece is intoxicating. I got to thinking about the end and realized I’m only to be remembered by those who kept me close. And when they go I become an anonymous traveller passing through. Great write with so many nooks and crannies to make you think.
H🌷
20th Jul 2020 1:02pm
Thanks so much, H.
I have no children and only a smattering of family spread across the country, so I know this train of thought.
And ride it often.
Thanks again for reading and commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.
J.
I have no children and only a smattering of family spread across the country, so I know this train of thought.
And ride it often.
Thanks again for reading and commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed my poem.
J.
20th Jul 2020 5:34pm
This was a WOW !!!
quite emotive, dually depth
Great great piece Java!!!
quite emotive, dually depth
Great great piece Java!!!
20th Jul 2020 10:35pm
Thanks again, s., for reading and for all your kind and thoughtful comments.
I'm so glad you enjoyed this one.
J.
I'm so glad you enjoyed this one.
J.
