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A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
Your field is full of ears of wheat.
They are quite ripe, and bending heads.
When you go there and know your hands
have produced the crops, you feel great.
You feel you are the man who used
the moments of your life so well.
You ploughed, you sowed and could excel.
Now, you can reap what your hands served.
I ask Your help, my loving Lord,
to make me use all what l can
so that when l achieve my plan,
I live the surge that You award.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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Your field is full of ears of wheat.
They are quite ripe, and bending heads.
When you go there and know your hands
have produced the crops, you feel great.
You feel you are the man who used
the moments of your life so well.
You ploughed, you sowed and could excel.
Now, you can reap what your hands served.
I ask Your help, my loving Lord,
to make me use all what l can
so that when l achieve my plan,
I live the surge that You award.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
____________________________________
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
27th Jun 2020 11:51am
Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
"Your field is full of ears of wheat.
They are quite ripe and bending heads."
I wonder if you realize, given the presumption that you think that "bending heads" is governed by "are", that your expression "They are ... bending heads" actually conveys the idea that ears of wheat are engaged in bending heads other than their own. If you meant to say that what shows that the ears are "quite ripe" (an abstraction that needs a simile to make clear what "quite" ripe is) is that their heads are bent towards the ground, you should have written, "they are quite ripe, **have** bending heads".
In any case, this is "all tell, no show", since it is made up of declarative sentences.
BTW, what "surge" does "the Lord" award for a person's effort to do what a man can?
And shouldn't you have used commas of address in the first line of your last stanza (I ask Your help, my loving Lord,)?
They are quite ripe and bending heads."
I wonder if you realize, given the presumption that you think that "bending heads" is governed by "are", that your expression "They are ... bending heads" actually conveys the idea that ears of wheat are engaged in bending heads other than their own. If you meant to say that what shows that the ears are "quite ripe" (an abstraction that needs a simile to make clear what "quite" ripe is) is that their heads are bent towards the ground, you should have written, "they are quite ripe, **have** bending heads".
In any case, this is "all tell, no show", since it is made up of declarative sentences.
BTW, what "surge" does "the Lord" award for a person's effort to do what a man can?
And shouldn't you have used commas of address in the first line of your last stanza (I ask Your help, my loving Lord,)?
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
1- Yes, the commas of address are a blunder. Thank you for reminding me.
2-l don't agree with you on the first idea.
They are quite ripe, and [they are] bending heads. They are: is repeated after and, so they can be omitted. ...They are: belong to THE EARS OF WHEAT. Now,to say and have: is not necessary. Moreover,, how can you say BENDING THE HEADS OF OTHERS, RATHER THAN THEIR OWN? This idea needs explanation[ what others]? The complication you aroused here is not feasible. With the knowledge of some grammar, you can solve the problem.
2-l don't agree with you on the first idea.
They are quite ripe, and [they are] bending heads. They are: is repeated after and, so they can be omitted. ...They are: belong to THE EARS OF WHEAT. Now,to say and have: is not necessary. Moreover,, how can you say BENDING THE HEADS OF OTHERS, RATHER THAN THEIR OWN? This idea needs explanation[ what others]? The complication you aroused here is not feasible. With the knowledge of some grammar, you can solve the problem.
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They are quite ripe, and [they are] bending heads. They are: is repeated after and, so they can be omitted. ...They are: belong to THE EARS OF WHEAT
That you thought you were saying "they [ears of wheat] are bending heads" is **something I already noted** you thought you were saying. But leaving aside that the comma you use before "and" makes "bending heads" a separate clause, to say "ears are bending heads" is to say that ears are **agents" engaged in the bending of heads.
"The complication you aroused here is not feasible" What sort of English is this? Does one arouse ("cause someone to have a particular feeling; cause someone to feel sexual excitement -- https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/arouse) complications?
And what I said about the meaning that your expression has is not only "possible" (https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/feasible) but grammatically and syntactically demanded.
That you thought you were saying "they [ears of wheat] are bending heads" is **something I already noted** you thought you were saying. But leaving aside that the comma you use before "and" makes "bending heads" a separate clause, to say "ears are bending heads" is to say that ears are **agents" engaged in the bending of heads.
"The complication you aroused here is not feasible" What sort of English is this? Does one arouse ("cause someone to have a particular feeling; cause someone to feel sexual excitement -- https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/arouse) complications?
And what I said about the meaning that your expression has is not only "possible" (https://www.ldoceonline.com/dictionary/feasible) but grammatically and syntactically demanded.
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
27th Jun 2020 7:36pm
1- Please, before saying that about [arouse], look it up in any dictionary you like and read the other meanings it has. I hope you will find out it has other meanings.
2-Where do you bring the meaning that EARS ARE AGENTS ENGAGED IN BENDING HEADS. Which sentence pattern do you use to have this meaning? Give me the sentence pattern.
2-Where do you bring the meaning that EARS ARE AGENTS ENGAGED IN BENDING HEADS. Which sentence pattern do you use to have this meaning? Give me the sentence pattern.
Re: Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
27th Jun 2020 8:20pm
I looked it up in Longman and the Cambridge Dictionary of the English Language. Didn't you see my citations?
And here's the entry from the Oxford English Dictionary"
arouse, v.
Etymology: < a- prefix1 + rouse v.1, after such pairs as rise, arise, wake, awake.
1. To raise or stir up (a person) from sleep or inactivity; to awaken.
a1616 W. Shakespeare Henry VI, Pt. 2 (1623) iv. i. 3 Loud houling Wolues arouse the Iades That dragge the Tragicke melancholy night.
1791 W. Cowper tr. Homer Iliad in Iliad & Odyssey I. x. 36 Grasping his spear, forth issu'd to arouse His brother.
1860 J. Tyndall Glaciers of Alps i. §11. 80 [I] fell asleep. My friend, however, soon aroused me.
2. To stir up into activity, excite (principles of action, emotions, etc.).
[1604 W. Shakespeare Hamlet ii. ii. 491 A rowsed vengeance sets him new a worke.]
1730 J. Thomson Spring in Seasons 47 But absent, what fantastic pangs arrous'd, Rage in each thought.
1856 C. Merivale Hist. Romans under Empire V. xlv. 225 No suspicion was aroused.
1863 F. A. Kemble Jrnl. Resid. Georgian Plantation 20 It arouses the killing propensity in me.
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3. intransitive (for reflexive). To wake up, bestir oneself.
1822 W. Havergal in Life (1882) 33 The parish began to arouse and visitors to inquire.
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4. transitive. To induce a state of sexual arousal in. Occasionally also intransitive.
1948 A. C. Kinsey et al. Sexual Behavior Human Male x. 363 The upper level male is aroused by a considerable variety of sexual stimuli.
1968 ‘N. Blake’ Private Wound v. 69 She used none of the experienced woman's verbal tricks to arouse me, none of the shameless, titillating, love-talk.
1989 R. Jones Transparent Gestures iv. 62 I hated those sycophants who followed them..those whores who knew all the tricks to arouse.
2004 Independent 30 Apr. (Tabloid ed.) 3/3 Freud wrote rather pompously about foot fetishists, who are aroused by a part of the body he considered ‘very inappropriate for sexual purposes’.
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What dictionary has definitions other than the ones I previously cited (and are attested to by the OED) and that show that "arouse" is used with "complications"?
As to sentence patterns:
The wrestler was bending heads.
She was occupied with bending the heads of dolls until they popped off of their bodies.
Gravity was bending the heads of flowers towards the earth.
And here's the entry from the Oxford English Dictionary"
arouse, v.
Etymology: < a- prefix1 + rouse v.1, after such pairs as rise, arise, wake, awake.
1. To raise or stir up (a person) from sleep or inactivity; to awaken.
a1616 W. Shakespeare Henry VI, Pt. 2 (1623) iv. i. 3 Loud houling Wolues arouse the Iades That dragge the Tragicke melancholy night.
1791 W. Cowper tr. Homer Iliad in Iliad & Odyssey I. x. 36 Grasping his spear, forth issu'd to arouse His brother.
1860 J. Tyndall Glaciers of Alps i. §11. 80 [I] fell asleep. My friend, however, soon aroused me.
2. To stir up into activity, excite (principles of action, emotions, etc.).
[1604 W. Shakespeare Hamlet ii. ii. 491 A rowsed vengeance sets him new a worke.]
1730 J. Thomson Spring in Seasons 47 But absent, what fantastic pangs arrous'd, Rage in each thought.
1856 C. Merivale Hist. Romans under Empire V. xlv. 225 No suspicion was aroused.
1863 F. A. Kemble Jrnl. Resid. Georgian Plantation 20 It arouses the killing propensity in me.
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3. intransitive (for reflexive). To wake up, bestir oneself.
1822 W. Havergal in Life (1882) 33 The parish began to arouse and visitors to inquire.
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4. transitive. To induce a state of sexual arousal in. Occasionally also intransitive.
1948 A. C. Kinsey et al. Sexual Behavior Human Male x. 363 The upper level male is aroused by a considerable variety of sexual stimuli.
1968 ‘N. Blake’ Private Wound v. 69 She used none of the experienced woman's verbal tricks to arouse me, none of the shameless, titillating, love-talk.
1989 R. Jones Transparent Gestures iv. 62 I hated those sycophants who followed them..those whores who knew all the tricks to arouse.
2004 Independent 30 Apr. (Tabloid ed.) 3/3 Freud wrote rather pompously about foot fetishists, who are aroused by a part of the body he considered ‘very inappropriate for sexual purposes’.
(Hide quotations)
What dictionary has definitions other than the ones I previously cited (and are attested to by the OED) and that show that "arouse" is used with "complications"?
As to sentence patterns:
The wrestler was bending heads.
She was occupied with bending the heads of dolls until they popped off of their bodies.
Gravity was bending the heads of flowers towards the earth.
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
27th Jun 2020 9:12pm
1- Arouse: from all the meanings you wrote, you chose only the sexual one.
2- You use the sentence pattern: n vt n. Why don't you use: n vi . He bent down reverently. They are quite ripe, and they are in the state of bending heads because of their weight.
2- You use the sentence pattern: n vt n. Why don't you use: n vi . He bent down reverently. They are quite ripe, and they are in the state of bending heads because of their weight.
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"1- Arouse: from all the meanings you wrote, you chose only the sexual one. "
Ah, the underhanded trick of selective quotation. I also noted -- as does Longman -- that it means "cause someone to have a particular feeling". Thanks for once again misquoting me.
In any case, where and what are the meanings of "arouse" that "any dictionary shows" that the verb has other than the ones listed in the OED?
"2- You use the sentence pattern: n vt n. Why don't you use: n vi . [sic ?] He bent [himself?] down reverently. They are quite ripe, and they are in the state of bending heads because of their weight. "
Why should I? To claim that something **is** "bending heads" is to claim that that something is engaged in an action, not existing in a state. Moreover, for your claim of what you are saying that you are saying to be correct, you'd need to have said " their heads are bent down by their weight".
And BTW, your example sentence is not strictly speaking intransitive. It contains/implies an unexpressed object. The verb is being used reflexively.
Ah, the underhanded trick of selective quotation. I also noted -- as does Longman -- that it means "cause someone to have a particular feeling". Thanks for once again misquoting me.
In any case, where and what are the meanings of "arouse" that "any dictionary shows" that the verb has other than the ones listed in the OED?
"2- You use the sentence pattern: n vt n. Why don't you use: n vi . [sic ?] He bent [himself?] down reverently. They are quite ripe, and they are in the state of bending heads because of their weight. "
Why should I? To claim that something **is** "bending heads" is to claim that that something is engaged in an action, not existing in a state. Moreover, for your claim of what you are saying that you are saying to be correct, you'd need to have said " their heads are bent down by their weight".
And BTW, your example sentence is not strictly speaking intransitive. It contains/implies an unexpressed object. The verb is being used reflexively.
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
27th Jun 2020 9:57pm
The heads are bent by their weights supports your sentence, namely: the weights bend the beads, but l want to say the heads bend because of their weights.
I did not misquote you, AROUSE: is to bring into being. Doesn't this meaning suit the sentence. May l know what your job is?
I did not misquote you, AROUSE: is to bring into being. Doesn't this meaning suit the sentence. May l know what your job is?
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27th Jun 2020 10:51pm
"The heads are bent by their weights supports your sentence, namely: the weights bend the beads, but l want to say the heads bend because of their weights."
I trust you meant to say "the weight of the ears bend their heads" and that the heads bend because of their weight, not weightS.
I trust you meant to say "the weight of the ears bend their heads" and that the heads bend because of their weight, not weightS.
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
"I did not misquote you,"
Yes, you most certainly did when you stated apodictically that the only meaning I cited for "arouse" was the sexual one.
"AROUSE: is to bring into being. Doesn't this meaning suit the sentence. [sic ?]"
Note that this definition of "Arouse" is attenuated by "often as if by magic" (https://www.vocabulary.com/dictionary/arouse).
And are you saying that what you were saying when you wrote that I was "arousing complications" is that I was bringing something that heretofore did not exist complications **into being**, let alone "as if by magic"?
"May l know what your job is?".
You may know this as soon as you show me how and why knowing this has any bearing upon the validity of my remarks about your "work" and my responses to your replies to me and that you do not intend to use any information I might give you as a basis for employing the fallacy known as "poisoning the well".
BTW, you need to pay far more attention to punctuation and quotation marks than you are doing. [ is not a quotation mark. Neither is : And you often do not use ? where you should.
Yes, you most certainly did when you stated apodictically that the only meaning I cited for "arouse" was the sexual one.
"AROUSE: is to bring into being. Doesn't this meaning suit the sentence. [sic ?]"
Note that this definition of "Arouse" is attenuated by "often as if by magic" (https://www.vocabulary.com/dictionary/arouse).
And are you saying that what you were saying when you wrote that I was "arousing complications" is that I was bringing something that heretofore did not exist complications **into being**, let alone "as if by magic"?
"May l know what your job is?".
You may know this as soon as you show me how and why knowing this has any bearing upon the validity of my remarks about your "work" and my responses to your replies to me and that you do not intend to use any information I might give you as a basis for employing the fallacy known as "poisoning the well".
BTW, you need to pay far more attention to punctuation and quotation marks than you are doing. [ is not a quotation mark. Neither is : And you often do not use ? where you should.
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
27th Jun 2020 10:58pm
1-Often as it is magic: Do you want to work with magic?
2- Are you saying what you were saying. What is that Baldwin?
3- Did not exist complications... what do l see?
4-BYW: What is that? Sorry for the correction.
2- Are you saying what you were saying. What is that Baldwin?
3- Did not exist complications... what do l see?
4-BYW: What is that? Sorry for the correction.
Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
"1-Often as it is magic".
Is that what I wrote -- or what the vocabulary site says?
"2- Are you saying what you were saying. What is that [sic ,] Baldwin?".
A mangling of what I wrote.
Is that what I wrote -- or what the vocabulary site says?
"2- Are you saying what you were saying. What is that [sic ,] Baldwin?".
A mangling of what I wrote.
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
In the same vein:
He’s done his job.
He is awake,
and bending heads.
He feels so great.
He knows his fate
in bed.
So my good lord,
I have fulfilled my plan
and so I want,
for heaven’s sake,
just what I can,
your promised splurge
to make me feel
the lake.
He’s done his job.
He is awake,
and bending heads.
He feels so great.
He knows his fate
in bed.
So my good lord,
I have fulfilled my plan
and so I want,
for heaven’s sake,
just what I can,
your promised splurge
to make me feel
the lake.
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
28th Jun 2020 8:42am
Your piece here is an excellent example of your poetry, its clarity and perfection.
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If you are speaking truthfully rather than sarcastically,
then it's quite clear that you have no idea what good poetry looks like and are lacking in critical acumen.
then it's quite clear that you have no idea what good poetry looks like and are lacking in critical acumen.
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
28th Jun 2020 5:07pm
Re: Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
28th Jun 2020 5:30pm
If you are insinuating that I do not know what good poetry looks like and have no critical acumen, I note with interest that you have failed every time that I have asked you to do so to **demonstrate** this claim. That, surely, is a sign that **you** are the one who is deficient in these areas.
Cue the red herrings and the ad hominems in response to this claim.
Cue the red herrings and the ad hominems in response to this claim.
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
29th Jun 2020 1:57pm
"They are quite ripe, and bending heads."
They are quite ripe: their heads are bent
They are quite ripe: their heads are curved.
They are quite ripe: their heads are bent
They are quite ripe: their heads are curved.
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
29th Jun 2020 7:17pm
Thank you for your interest, but l don't want to break the rhyme. You are very kind, indeed.
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29th Jun 2020 7:21pm
Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
29th Jun 2020 11:00pm
No sense is sacrificed. I am satisfied with the sense l give. Thank you for you known concern.
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1st Jul 2020 6:28pm
That you are satisfied with the sense you give does not mean that your line makes sense.
In any case, what does "heads" thyme with?
In any case, what does "heads" thyme with?
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Re. A SURGE OF HAPPINESS
1st Jul 2020 7:22pm
That you say so doesn't mean you are right. I don't have much time to waste. If you have, explain, but in brief.
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29th Sep 2020 3:51am
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29th Sep 2020 11:54am