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If Only (I Could Fly)
Hello there, Mr. Bluebird!
How nice of you to visit me—
As you perch for a fleeting moment,
On the branch of a sweet gum tree.
I close my eyes and feel the wind
Blowing gently through my hair;
And wish that I could fly away,
So high into the air.
I'd fly so far away from here,
To a place where no one knows—
By the time they found I'd disappeared,
Oh, how far I will have flown!
I'd feel the wind beneath my wings,
And sing until my heart explodes.
I'd gather up a thousand strings,
To build myself a humble home.
Once my little nest was built,
I'd line it with the finest silk—
Of honeycombs and mother's milk,
Far from the land that I have bilked.
And that is where I'd like to stay,
In this place where songbirds dream.
What else is there that I can say?
If only I could fly today...
How nice of you to visit me—
As you perch for a fleeting moment,
On the branch of a sweet gum tree.
I close my eyes and feel the wind
Blowing gently through my hair;
And wish that I could fly away,
So high into the air.
I'd fly so far away from here,
To a place where no one knows—
By the time they found I'd disappeared,
Oh, how far I will have flown!
I'd feel the wind beneath my wings,
And sing until my heart explodes.
I'd gather up a thousand strings,
To build myself a humble home.
Once my little nest was built,
I'd line it with the finest silk—
Of honeycombs and mother's milk,
Far from the land that I have bilked.
And that is where I'd like to stay,
In this place where songbirds dream.
What else is there that I can say?
If only I could fly today...
Author's Note
Written yesterday while having a spiritual moment in nature...
As I watched a beautiful bluebird perched upon a wire, I closed my eyes and could feel the wind whipping through my hair and clothes... The warm sun on my face and the wind felt so lovely, I felt like I could just fly away.
As I watched a beautiful bluebird perched upon a wire, I closed my eyes and could feel the wind whipping through my hair and clothes... The warm sun on my face and the wind felt so lovely, I felt like I could just fly away.
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Re. If Only (I Could Fly)
21st Jun 2020 7:30pm
beautiful dearest NewB
I love watching birds
even when I'm in a bad mood they cheer me up
how could they not when they awaken us with song...
I love this ❤
I love watching birds
even when I'm in a bad mood they cheer me up
how could they not when they awaken us with song...
I love this ❤
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Re. If Only (I Could Fly)
21st Jun 2020 7:54pm
Dear NB,
Bravo! Lovely rhyming and meter. It was pretty to say out loud as well as read. I love flying away in my head even though I can’t really fly with my body. There’s such a release of burden flying away. I like you selected the bluebird, I’ve always heard they represent happiness. I’d settle for content at this stage.
The like the last line of the fifth stanza. For me it represented how we all wear masks of many features to get what we need from this world, but a place where it’s safe to be just who we are is/would be like finding the holy grail. Lovely write. H🌷
Bravo! Lovely rhyming and meter. It was pretty to say out loud as well as read. I love flying away in my head even though I can’t really fly with my body. There’s such a release of burden flying away. I like you selected the bluebird, I’ve always heard they represent happiness. I’d settle for content at this stage.
The like the last line of the fifth stanza. For me it represented how we all wear masks of many features to get what we need from this world, but a place where it’s safe to be just who we are is/would be like finding the holy grail. Lovely write. H🌷
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21st Jun 2020 8:28pm
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Re. If Only (I Could Fly)
22nd Jun 2020 1:13am
I love blue birds, my favorite of all. Blue Jay's stole my heart as kid. This writing is beautiful so naturally written.
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Re. If Only (I Could Fly)
You express the true sentimental pleasures of nature like no other, NB. There's a vivid essence, of not only it, and in this case, that of a gorgeous creature and it's miracle of flight, but your love for it. I can feel the soul poured into your words. This is a true beauty, because I'd love to take flight as well. We have a nest/birdhouse full of Blue Marlins right now.💝🐦
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Re. If Only (I Could Fly)
22nd Jun 2020 2:30am
I completely agree with everything Pandora said. People like you are beautiful. 💖
(I just saved a baby bird who fell out of a nest so it made me think of that also)
(I just saved a baby bird who fell out of a nest so it made me think of that also)
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Re. If Only (I Could Fly)
22nd Jun 2020 2:58am
What a beautiful capture of your moment with wind and bluebird. I love that you were able to express the feeling while also keeping such an easy rhyme and meter. I find I can often only do one or the other. Bravo!
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22nd Jun 2020 4:01am
Re. If Only (I Could Fly)
22nd Jun 2020 1:29pm
This is such a sweet poem. Since I'm a nature lover I really loved this ink...
Beautiful piece... Lovely cadence
Beautiful piece... Lovely cadence
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Re. If Only (I Could Fly)
22nd Jun 2020 4:33pm
This is a pure beauty NewB. You captured the moment in your poem. I love the dreamy feel and the tone of your spill. Birds are free creatures they epitomize freedom...wonderful I love it.❤🙏
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22nd Jun 2020 4:50pm
Re. If Only (I Could Fly)
23rd Jun 2020 7:25am
Would be lovely to be able to just fly and leave all those troubles behind. Great ink 😁
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24th Jun 2020 2:07pm
Re. If Only (I Could Fly)
28th Jun 2020 5:59pm
This poem is wonderfully executed! Somehow as I was reading it was as if my eyes closed but my mind was wide open. I felt myself soaring through the sky with you. I felt the brief peace when you found your place to stay.
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