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swansong
no
quack
am i despite the
whack of
w o r d s
that f l y
a b o v e
my t hi n
h o r i z o n
line. supine
i f l o a t
i n thick
and t h i n
a feather boat
the sky above
the sea beneath
me in between.
i surf in thick and thin
a feather boat. the sky
above the sea beneath
me in between a dove
serene. my mirror is a water
wall, my destiny i’ve never
seen. the little fish -- i swal-
lowed her one gulp so
clean without detection
into the sea of my reflection.
between the earth and sea i rest my soul. my life hangs in the balance as i roll.
© Copyright 2020 May 28
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
quack
am i despite the
whack of
w o r d s
that f l y
a b o v e
my t hi n
h o r i z o n
line. supine
i f l o a t
i n thick
and t h i n
a feather boat
the sky above
the sea beneath
me in between.
i surf in thick and thin
a feather boat. the sky
above the sea beneath
me in between a dove
serene. my mirror is a water
wall, my destiny i’ve never
seen. the little fish -- i swal-
lowed her one gulp so
clean without detection
into the sea of my reflection.
between the earth and sea i rest my soul. my life hangs in the balance as i roll.
© Copyright 2020 May 28
by Clyve A. Bowen♫
Published 17th Jun 2020
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17th Jun 2020 2:24pm
Simplicity and beauty of life, love of nature, appreciation of beauty
a perspective from one of the most elegant of large aquatic birds
.. a Swan'$ eye point of view
concrete poetry blended with a traditional style
tribute, creative imaginary on point, vision
nice flow and metering
Nice
... feed me back need your guidance
I'm a close on my ascertainment
Poet Respect
a perspective from one of the most elegant of large aquatic birds
.. a Swan'$ eye point of view
concrete poetry blended with a traditional style
tribute, creative imaginary on point, vision
nice flow and metering
Nice
... feed me back need your guidance
I'm a close on my ascertainment
Poet Respect
3rd Jul 2020 7:21pm
Thank you OG-P!
I'm certain you must realise I inadvertently overlooked this comment. Forgive me, please.
I am touched by your diligent desire to create a critical eye. This is certainly an avenue to learning the more subtle shades of literary criticism. It will serve you well.
Yes, the elegant swan takes centre stage and for a moment fills the wordspace of my canvas, making it a concrete or form poem.
Much of the beauty of the swan might lie hidden underneath its feathers much the same way that the words are hidden in the shape and the meaning in the words.
Yours sincerely
cab
I'm certain you must realise I inadvertently overlooked this comment. Forgive me, please.
I am touched by your diligent desire to create a critical eye. This is certainly an avenue to learning the more subtle shades of literary criticism. It will serve you well.
Yes, the elegant swan takes centre stage and for a moment fills the wordspace of my canvas, making it a concrete or form poem.
Much of the beauty of the swan might lie hidden underneath its feathers much the same way that the words are hidden in the shape and the meaning in the words.
Yours sincerely
cab
4th Jul 2020 00:19am
