deepundergroundpoetry.com
Asylum
His silence spoke in volumes—
solemn tomes in a library of shame,
where broken spines and dragon bones
line her catacombs with pain.
Bitter pain-tings of her past regrets—
picturesque, they rest in smiling frames;
she keeps her demons locked away
in an asylum for the insane.
Scratching at the surface (tension),
nervous, behind her tempered glass;
they convince her that she’s worthless,
as she breathes their toxic gas.
But she’s building her immunity—
inoculated by the Light,
to the noxious importunity
which keeps her wide awake at night.
She finds a hidden sanctuary,
from this sanguinary fight...
amongst a community of fairies,
in the city of the light.
solemn tomes in a library of shame,
where broken spines and dragon bones
line her catacombs with pain.
Bitter pain-tings of her past regrets—
picturesque, they rest in smiling frames;
she keeps her demons locked away
in an asylum for the insane.
Scratching at the surface (tension),
nervous, behind her tempered glass;
they convince her that she’s worthless,
as she breathes their toxic gas.
But she’s building her immunity—
inoculated by the Light,
to the noxious importunity
which keeps her wide awake at night.
She finds a hidden sanctuary,
from this sanguinary fight...
amongst a community of fairies,
in the city of the light.
Author's Note
Inspired by a good friend...
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
likes 25
reading list entries 10
comments 23
reads 687
Commenting Preference:
The author encourages honest critique.
Re. Asylum for the Insane
10th Jun 2020 10:20pm
Wonderful job with the rhyme on this ... excellent flow ... a steady cadence ... bravo NB ...
1
Re: Re. Asylum for the Insane
10th Jun 2020 10:55pm
Thank you so much, LilDragonFly!
I spent a lot of time working on this one...
Focusing on the subtle nuances... so I appreciate those kind compliments 🌹😊
I spent a lot of time working on this one...
Focusing on the subtle nuances... so I appreciate those kind compliments 🌹😊
Re. Asylum
11th Jun 2020 6:22am
Re: Re. Asylum
11th Jun 2020 2:52pm
Top shelf! I don't know about that, but I appreciate the flattery, good friend! This one held a deeper meaning for me, as it is about a friend and her struggle. Thanks so much for your kindness and support, OG, it means a lot! ❤️🙏
Re: Re. Asylum
11th Jun 2020 3:52pm
your style your flow and your structure is on point..
Deep content
Ok.. your count is almost perfect (you may be off by one or two syllables but,)
how about lower top shelve
Mentor respect
Deep content
Ok.. your count is almost perfect (you may be off by one or two syllables but,)
how about lower top shelve
Mentor respect
1
Re. Asylum
11th Jun 2020 8:12am
That we could all find the sanctuary we seek
Everyone needs a reprieve from the various demons that plague us all
Everyone needs a reprieve from the various demons that plague us all
1
Re: Re. Asylum
11th Jun 2020 7:12pm
Hey FB300, good to see you here!! That is very true... We all need a safe place to get a sense of peace. Thank you for your kind words, and for taking the time to read and comment! I appreciate you! 😁
Re. Asylum
11th Jun 2020 10:33am
Re: Re. Asylum
11th Jun 2020 10:51pm
Awww, Summer, you always have kind words for me. I'm very grateful for those kind words along with your support and friendship! You're awesome ❤️
Re. Asylum
11th Jun 2020 11:11am
Re: Re. Asylum
19th Jun 2020 1:26pm
Thanks so much for that stunning review, Nightmoth! It means a lot! It's good to see you around here again... I appreciate you stopping by to visit me 😊🙏
Re. Asylum
11th Jun 2020 3:24pm
Re: Re. Asylum
19th Jun 2020 1:29pm
Awww, thank you for your sweet compliment! I'm so glad you enjoyed it, Edible 😁
Thanks for stopping by to read and comment ❤️🙏
Thanks for stopping by to read and comment ❤️🙏
Re. Asylum
11th Jun 2020 11:00pm
Beautiful, I really loved the combination of negative and positive visuals in this.
0
Re. Asylum
12th Jun 2020 2:33am
I could not love this poem more. After reading it through 4 times, I still cannot get beyond the beauty of the words and the hope of the message to offer the slightest helpful technical critique. This piece hit me in all the vulnerable spots. Well done.
0
Re. Asylum
12th Jun 2020 5:28am
Re. Asylum
13th Jun 2020 00:29am
dearest NewB this is bloody great
it's so intense I'm sorry I missed it
I didn't know you posted it...
I love this 💕
it's so intense I'm sorry I missed it
I didn't know you posted it...
I love this 💕
0
Re. Asylum
26th Jun 2020 4:04am
This is both pretty and haunting, I love that combination, the title compliments the message with its duality of meaning, sometimes a real person can be the most poignant inspiration..
0
Re. Asylum
Anonymous
27th Jun 2020 2:20am
Hey NB.......this is a brilliant tribute to your friend........very intriguing........luv it......RL for me.......purple luv & hugs xo :)
0
Re. Asylum
27th Jun 2020 8:45pm
Anonymous
- Edited 24th Dec 2020 7:45am
6th Oct 2020 1:43am
<< post removed >>