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A better man
I want to make love to you
Until we reach the stars and moon
I want to whisk you away
To a better day
Liven up your loins
Hold your heart in my hands
Make you feel like a woman
Until you understand
That I'm the man
Who will treat you amazingly
Who will always look into your heavenly eyes gazingly
And treasure your body
Intimately
I will never hurt you
Or speak aggressively
The way I treat you
Will become a legacy
For you've never experienced a man like me before
Usually jumped into bed prematurely
I will treat you like a Queen
Never be mean
Or let you down in any way
I'm here to stay
What do you say?
Until we reach the stars and moon
I want to whisk you away
To a better day
Liven up your loins
Hold your heart in my hands
Make you feel like a woman
Until you understand
That I'm the man
Who will treat you amazingly
Who will always look into your heavenly eyes gazingly
And treasure your body
Intimately
I will never hurt you
Or speak aggressively
The way I treat you
Will become a legacy
For you've never experienced a man like me before
Usually jumped into bed prematurely
I will treat you like a Queen
Never be mean
Or let you down in any way
I'm here to stay
What do you say?
Published 5th May 2020
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Girl or boy oh to be treated properly, loved, honoured and desired, oh where are you my sweet elusive desire.
Loved you ladyship
Loved you ladyship
5th May 2020 3:22am
5th May 2020 3:24am
A desire we all have but to find the elusive lover, if only we knew where to start xx
Beautiful, you write with good male POV. I chime with the blend of romantic and sexy. Favourite lines:
I want to whisk you away
to a better day. [would make good phrase for proposing an intimate weekend]
Liven up your loins
Hold your heart in my hands
Make you feel like a woman
Until you understand
I want to whisk you away
to a better day. [would make good phrase for proposing an intimate weekend]
Liven up your loins
Hold your heart in my hands
Make you feel like a woman
Until you understand
Anonymous
5th May 2020 9:58am
Beautifully spilled
5th May 2020 12:28pm
8th May 2020 9:52am
Anonymous
16th May 2020 3:46am
i feel it too, .. like You SAngel
, .. sweet words, .. sweet talk
ha ha
and life was but a dream
, .. sweet words, .. sweet talk
ha ha
and life was but a dream
16th May 2020 5:36am
11th Jul 2020 4:38am
30th Jul 2020 12:41pm
An amazing list of promises, delivery is the test. Great poem. Thanks for sharing. (Pease, oral)
Anonymous
21st Aug 2020 9:32am
I like how you did the rhyme from a males perspective, writing and rhyming like that takes versatility:)
22nd Aug 2020 7:38am
28th May 2021 12:40pm
Nothing better than having some quality time
With the one you love
Doing the things lovers do in special ways
With the one you love
Doing the things lovers do in special ways
