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Contrails
It was contrails
that made me
think of you
Adventurous fanciful contrails
The adventure and unknown
excited me
their gravity
pulled me
close to you
Now my only reminder
of you
is the thin tan line
wrapped around
my left ring finger
The indentation won't
go away
My lovely petite hand
haunted
by a changed mind
that made me
think of you
Adventurous fanciful contrails
The adventure and unknown
excited me
their gravity
pulled me
close to you
Now my only reminder
of you
is the thin tan line
wrapped around
my left ring finger
The indentation won't
go away
My lovely petite hand
haunted
by a changed mind
Published 12th Jan 2012
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Anonymous
12th Jan 2012 6:05am
"Now my only reminder
of you
is the thin tan line
wrapped around
my left ring finger
The indentation won't
go away
My lovely petite hand
haunted
by a changed mind"
The truth in that stanza is haunting to me...it was long after my divorce before mine went away and it made me cry all the time when i noticed it. Well written, I really felt that one
of you
is the thin tan line
wrapped around
my left ring finger
The indentation won't
go away
My lovely petite hand
haunted
by a changed mind"
The truth in that stanza is haunting to me...it was long after my divorce before mine went away and it made me cry all the time when i noticed it. Well written, I really felt that one
12th Jan 2012 6:27pm
Thanks for reading. I'm glad you can relate, kinda-well you know what I mean. It is a haunting image so remember.
-GGH
-GGH
Anonymous
12th Jan 2012 8:32am
That is a magnificent write... oddly I felt like you were replying to one of mine.
Technicaly perfect.
Imagery wonderful.
Emotions portrayed so very well.
Well done!
Al -x-
Technicaly perfect.
Imagery wonderful.
Emotions portrayed so very well.
Well done!
Al -x-
12th Jan 2012 6:28pm
Which one? Send me a link please? :)
Thank you for the wonderful comment.
Thank you for the wonderful comment.
Anonymous
12th Jan 2012 3:03pm
GGH,
The simple progression of this one makes it perfect. Loved your last stanza!
"My lovely petite hand
haunted
by a changed mind"
Great write!
tornado
The simple progression of this one makes it perfect. Loved your last stanza!
"My lovely petite hand
haunted
by a changed mind"
Great write!
tornado
12th Jan 2012 6:33pm
I'm glad you loved it. Thanks for reading and your excellent comment, like always.
-GGH
-GGH
