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The war of love and friends
I hate to choose
I hate to be chosen
I hate choice
I hate war
but war Love's love
and love is death
death is the ashes
we choke on
air or dryness?
sink or swim?
embrace both
when love is a small series of deaths
so we embrace all the time
we gain each others trust
and trust is in our tears
no matter who's fault it is
everybody Love's you
but I'm all for quality
not quantity
from endless mood-swings
to piteous over-throws
we still talk
and forget
life how it really is
you can lift my wings, my friend
but can you bare to see me love
of whom you hate?
I hate to be chosen
I hate choice
I hate war
but war Love's love
and love is death
death is the ashes
we choke on
air or dryness?
sink or swim?
embrace both
when love is a small series of deaths
so we embrace all the time
we gain each others trust
and trust is in our tears
no matter who's fault it is
everybody Love's you
but I'm all for quality
not quantity
from endless mood-swings
to piteous over-throws
we still talk
and forget
life how it really is
you can lift my wings, my friend
but can you bare to see me love
of whom you hate?
Published 10th Jan 2012
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10th Jan 2012 6:00pm
there are some things about the poem I really like. Mostly the interplay between to polar opposites "love and war", and the overall theme you are getting. saying that, the poem can be a little incoherent as it goes along and there are a few cliches that should be cleaned up. I see something here that I like
10th Jan 2012 7:41pm
I still don't see, from your poem, why love and friendship interplay, intertwine, maybe, but it seems the poet has either gone too far or has not expressed with more poetic decision what cries out to be said.
11th Jan 2012 3:50pm
ok the poem in a nutshell: the narrator has to or feels like choosing between friendship or love, basically the narrator falls in love with the best friends enemy, so it's like one or the other
