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memories reflected
Underneath my skin
There's a soul that none can see.
A little less smiley,
A little less sure
Sometimes struggling
Sometimes desiring
Underneath my outside smile
A hidden frown
My granite face
Belies contorted
Extinguished flames
Tarnished dreams
Insatible essence
Bereft of desire
Stored in a tin box
Memories reflected
In the dusty
Attic mirror
Draped with cobwebs
For another time
There's a soul that none can see.
A little less smiley,
A little less sure
Sometimes struggling
Sometimes desiring
Underneath my outside smile
A hidden frown
My granite face
Belies contorted
Extinguished flames
Tarnished dreams
Insatible essence
Bereft of desire
Stored in a tin box
Memories reflected
In the dusty
Attic mirror
Draped with cobwebs
For another time
Published 17th Mar 2020
Author's Note
This poem was co-written with a good friend of mine. He created the first seven lines, then I added mine. (He is not on this site, but writes for himself.)
All writing remains the property of the author. Don't use it for any purpose without their permission.
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17th Mar 2020 6:49pm
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19th Mar 2020 11:50am
19th Mar 2020 2:53pm
19th Mar 2020 11:22pm
Glad you could relate. Touching another is the very signature of expressions of our core beings. Thank you for your comment.
20th Mar 2020 1:33am
Excellent writing... the both of you. I can relate to this well.
I have struggled with depression for as long as I can remember. Your poem actually makes me think of a song which I am fond of... "Tracks Of My Tears"
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oejSyeuZY2M
Here are some of the lyrics:
"People say I'm the life of the party
'Cause I tell a joke or two
Although I might be laughing loud and hearty
Deep inside I'm blue
So take a good look at my face
You know my smile looks out of place
If you look closer it's easy to trace
The tracks of my tears"
Anyway... thank you for sharing! :)
I have struggled with depression for as long as I can remember. Your poem actually makes me think of a song which I am fond of... "Tracks Of My Tears"
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oejSyeuZY2M
Here are some of the lyrics:
"People say I'm the life of the party
'Cause I tell a joke or two
Although I might be laughing loud and hearty
Deep inside I'm blue
So take a good look at my face
You know my smile looks out of place
If you look closer it's easy to trace
The tracks of my tears"
Anyway... thank you for sharing! :)
Thank you for your very lovely comment. I know that song well. I'm beginning to realize the signature of a good write is its ability to reach into the deep within of another human being.
21st Mar 2020 3:04pm
21st Mar 2020 3:07pm
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