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[ Spiritual ] Sur ▪ render
Sir Knight,
it feels so good to erase the
heroically tragic
( or perhaps
tragically heroic )
Past
where the iron of Trust
oxidizes if one lingers too long
There is no coming back
from the ravaging cancer
dissed rust is
lest it firstly consume
your armor and sword
rendering you exposed
naked upon the battlefield
laying down your arms
in complete surrender
to the moment
Published 18th Feb 2020
| Edited 18th May 2020
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There are not many Knights left in our dispensation for You to present this scroll to. . . (Ooooo, i used an ellipsis!!! -- LOL)
19th Feb 2020 00:38am
19th Feb 2020 00:39am
The bravest thing anyone ( knight or layman ) can do is surrender control to the moment at hand. This is beautifully written from a genuine perspective of truth.
19th Feb 2020 00:52am
And not too shabby for a few minutes of a writing, which doesn't happen very often for me. Usually I am in the Poem's way, elbowing it out and applying too much elbow grease in the process.
Thank you for your very targeted interpretation and much valued support. xo
Thank you for your very targeted interpretation and much valued support. xo
19th Feb 2020 00:55am
Those are the best kinds! They practically write themselves. You're welcome. xo
19th Feb 2020 1:50am
Down with the tradition of fighting to the death! Isn’t that the problem in the world today? Not every fight ends in victory... well written. :-)
19th Feb 2020 1:53am
19th Feb 2020 1:57am
20th Feb 2020 1:51am
This poem.touches home for me very well written.
Im enjoying reading your work.
Im enjoying reading your work.
20th Feb 2020 2:01am
6th Jul 2020 6:59pm
The rape of many a woman has seen the snatching of her body while she refuses to yield her spirit and thus participate.
Spiritual "sur render" renders an emasculated future that rusts and rots into total oblivion. Your metaphor is bigger than life itself:
"There is no coming back
from the ravaging cancer...that [renders one] exposed naked upon the battlefield."
A masterful image, JB!
Sincerely
cab
Spiritual "sur render" renders an emasculated future that rusts and rots into total oblivion. Your metaphor is bigger than life itself:
"There is no coming back
from the ravaging cancer...that [renders one] exposed naked upon the battlefield."
A masterful image, JB!
Sincerely
cab
7th Jul 2020 3:13am
Thank you, Cabby! The Present is where the party is at; best not to be too late or too early.
