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MAN IS SO STRONG !
MAN IS SO STRONG !
Who tells you that l am too weak?
I could construct the pyramids.
I have walked on the distant moon,
and made man well when falling ill.
Don't be surprised. I'm none but you.
Just think of what you daily do.
You work more than the restless ant.
The bee beside you feels shy too.
You are astonished ! Don't be so.
You are a human. Don't you know ?
You have a mind that masters all.
You join it with toil and say go.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
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Who tells you that l am too weak?
I could construct the pyramids.
I have walked on the distant moon,
and made man well when falling ill.
Don't be surprised. I'm none but you.
Just think of what you daily do.
You work more than the restless ant.
The bee beside you feels shy too.
You are astonished ! Don't be so.
You are a human. Don't you know ?
You have a mind that masters all.
You join it with toil and say go.
BY JOSEPH ZENIEH
ALL RIGHTS RESERVED
_____________________________________
Published 24th Jan 2020
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24th Jan 2020 10:43pm
Grammar gaffe.
The bee beside you feelS shy [sic ,] too.
A subject in the singular demands that its verb be in singular.
And is feeling shy really a contrast with working hard? Sorry, but once again you are letting your desire to get rhymes get in the way of being conceptually sound.
The bee beside you feelS shy [sic ,] too.
A subject in the singular demands that its verb be in singular.
And is feeling shy really a contrast with working hard? Sorry, but once again you are letting your desire to get rhymes get in the way of being conceptually sound.
This line:
"and made man well when falling ill"
not only gives the impression that the speaker here is not a human being, but is someone who did his/her/its healing while he/she it/ was falling ill.
And what's with the assertion that your speaker **could** construct the pyramids. So far as I know, "man" did do so. So why make an assertion about potentiality?
It's becoming more and more clear to me that you are patently unable to see that you really don't say what you think you are saying when you write.
"and made man well when falling ill"
not only gives the impression that the speaker here is not a human being, but is someone who did his/her/its healing while he/she it/ was falling ill.
And what's with the assertion that your speaker **could** construct the pyramids. So far as I know, "man" did do so. So why make an assertion about potentiality?
It's becoming more and more clear to me that you are patently unable to see that you really don't say what you think you are saying when you write.
