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Downtown Diptych
From Eleventh floor
traverse the obscure urban valley 'tween towers
linger awhile in the shady rooftop Eden
then up, up into the gray, white, and blue afternoon sky
Twenty five panes over, three panes down
fluffy white clouds, blue peeking through
portrait of sky on mirrored canvas
three story easel
traverse the obscure urban valley 'tween towers
linger awhile in the shady rooftop Eden
then up, up into the gray, white, and blue afternoon sky
Twenty five panes over, three panes down
fluffy white clouds, blue peeking through
portrait of sky on mirrored canvas
three story easel
Published 24th Jan 2020
Author's Note
Inspired by the "Your Sky" competition. Wrote this in my comment to Asouladareatease, Working in a forest of skyscrapers I have to find nature peering between man-planted monoliths. I do have a view of a nice rooftop garden...thank goodness I have a cubicle with a view.
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24th Jan 2020 8:59am
Good Luck in the Comp. Gahddess this one rolls off the tongue-Imagery -Excellence!!!
24th Jan 2020 2:57pm
Thank you my friend! ! I am pleased you like this piece. After listening to your PoetCast interview I consider
you as one in tune with nature so your comment is encouraging. Working in a forest of skyscrapers I have to find nature peering between man-planted monoliths. I do have a view of a nice rooftop garden...thank goodness I have a cubicle with a view.
you as one in tune with nature so your comment is encouraging. Working in a forest of skyscrapers I have to find nature peering between man-planted monoliths. I do have a view of a nice rooftop garden...thank goodness I have a cubicle with a view.
24th Jan 2020 3:28pm
24th Jan 2020 7:02pm
25th Jan 2020 8:17pm
Oh wow, you certainly painted a very vivid imagery of your scene GW.
Even though you are trapped in tall buildings, your optimism shines through.
Even though you are trapped in tall buildings, your optimism shines through.
25th Jan 2020 8:50pm
Thank you so much, Layla! I do feel trapped at times and especially when the weather is beautiful out.
26th Jan 2020 6:58pm
My view of the city is one of urban blight. This is a refreshing change. Fine work!
26th Jan 2020 8:07pm
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28th Jan 2020 00:38am
Thank you, Soledad! I actually had to remove the glare of my office lights from the picture so it took awhile. I am always encouraged by your comments. Win or lose, I use competitions to stimulate thought when I'm in a funk.
12th Feb 2020 10:34pm
Awesome, Gahdess :)
I really liked this one... I guess the comp is probably over by now, eh? Lol
I really liked this one... I guess the comp is probably over by now, eh? Lol
12th Feb 2020 11:11pm
Thank you so much! It was fun to write and I am so pleased you like it. Yeah, it was a runner-up in the comp.
12th Feb 2020 11:18pm
