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The Lake
the lake lies by a roadside
hidden by hedges and trees
a stretch of country lane
that passes through an English village
Old Money and New
a village with a history one would choose to forget
the lake looks calm on a summer day
the water reflecting rural surroundings
an oasis that invites people to dive in and swim
but no one dares
the village legend remains strong
the myths and the facts
memories of those that have drowned in the lake
the lake
stay away
hidden by hedges and trees
a stretch of country lane
that passes through an English village
Old Money and New
a village with a history one would choose to forget
the lake looks calm on a summer day
the water reflecting rural surroundings
an oasis that invites people to dive in and swim
but no one dares
the village legend remains strong
the myths and the facts
memories of those that have drowned in the lake
the lake
stay away
Published 11th Jan 2020
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11th Jan 2020 11:04pm
11th Jan 2020 11:38pm
11th Jan 2020 11:48pm
12th Jan 2020 00:18am
You have captured the atmosphere of this sinister lake so, yes, enjoyable poem.
12th Jan 2020 8:16pm
12th Jan 2020 00:24am
Thanks for the warning. I'm not swimming there!
Good atmosphere in this one Lozzamus.
cheers,
buddhakitty.
Good atmosphere in this one Lozzamus.
cheers,
buddhakitty.
12th Jan 2020 8:19pm
12th Jan 2020 12:08pm
"Old Money and New
a village with a history one would choose to forget"
What I like about this statement is that it reinforces the readers' focus on the lake.
I want to know more. Well done, Lozz!
a village with a history one would choose to forget"
What I like about this statement is that it reinforces the readers' focus on the lake.
I want to know more. Well done, Lozz!
12th Jan 2020 8:22pm
Many thanks, JohnnyBlaze. The lake itself is calming, but I may use the scenery for a novel, a thriller. The actual location is more about New Money than Old.
17th Jan 2020 11:19pm
FINALLY! I have been thinking since you first posted this, what it reminded me of. I finally found it!
Stephen King's Creep Show The Raft! 😖
https://youtu.be/V8pro4n4irI
You can tell it's good poetry when it stays on your mind, Lozzamus!
Stephen King's Creep Show The Raft! 😖
https://youtu.be/V8pro4n4irI
You can tell it's good poetry when it stays on your mind, Lozzamus!
18th Jan 2020 00:05am
18th Jan 2020 10:51pm
There is always something people fear. In towns they have their own scary legend. Haunted lake, crazy people in the woods, chewbacca, and other things. Thanks for the advice about the lake lol. You captured the feeling toward the lake very well. It was very well narrated and had me curious about the name of this lake.
20th Jan 2020 9:49pm
Thanks, Cosiest. For some reason, I didn't see your comment till now. The lake's in Totteridge Village on the outskirts of London, UK. There's no history there (though lots of New Money). I used the scenery as a stepping stone to a story-like poem.
Thanks again.
Thanks again.
