[ CC ] Injustifications

I think it's very interesting that Hughes used 'comrades' in his original piece.  I don't know why I find that striking, but I do. Probably because it's not a word often used down south - much less by African Americans of his era.  I am wondering if there is some irony to that he metaphorically used.  The essence of his poem is to overcome via unity. He was one to know singular thought or action wasn't enough- but it would take a revolution of sorts to tear down the walls.

Your play on words is very clever; that is your strong suit.  The repetition imitates and symbolizes day-to-day nothing-has-changed in the life of an oppressed people.  Yours very succinctly puts reason to rhyme in the civil war which would alter our soil's history forever.  

Excellent offering.

Thank you again. 😊 Yes, I too find the word "comrade" out of place. I always think Russian when I hear it. And then I think of unity in response to that and perhaps that was his intent; to encourage black readers to think outside the box of American thinking altogether ( every man for himself ).  
 
All boundaries are limitations, but it is the barriers invisible to  those being kept at bay that are the most confounding and thus challenging because they are non-existant in material terms, which amplifies the frustration and despair.  

And speaking of rhyme, I tried my best to honor the inspiration poem with a similar form.

Langston Hughes was a man of tremendous courage to write like he did during that time in American history. Living in the south as a child in the 1960's shape my worldview and helped me to understand that being different does not mean being inferior.
Well done Mr Blaze.

hugs,
buddhakitty.

We was before my time, so I have a lot of catching up to do. Thank you, BK.

powerful verses - a thoughtful pleasure to read

Thank you, SweetOblivion.

I enjoyed how your poem brings you right inside the crux of your thoughts.

Thank you, Jaded.

Thank you, Didier. It means a lot coming from a passionate and amazing artist such as yourself. My hope is for my poetry to portray as much story depth and color as your paintings do.

Internal power burning through discernment. Much respect Blaze

Thank you, Loki. Hughes blazed the trail that I walked upon this time.

So in the past when I've read Langston's work I used to wonder he wrote so effortlessly the plight of men. Your piece does the same, taking the old issues of prejudice that are still happening to this day. It's heartbreaking and scary.

Well done Johnny.

I've always carried a disdain for those who perpetuate division through stereotyping and prejudice. Thank you, Wally.

Wow, this is incredible piece of work. I especially enjoyed the first stanza. At first, I was perplexed by the last line about universal darkness, but then it dawned on me (pun intended, but also true-haha). While I'm not as versed in giving analysis or feedback as yourself or Ahavati, I appreciate this piece and that you also introduced me to "I Look at the World". I won't be able to think of Mr Hughes' poem without yours as well.

Thank you, Russel. That is very generous of you to say. And never worry about providing any deep analysis. Just offer up whatever comes to you in the moment