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Leashed
Eyes that show intent
aren't as scary as ones that show nothing.
I looked to the opposite side
of the world,
blazing my mind's vision downward.
To feel...
Quick closing. Hope that my thoughts
wouldn't cut filthy circles
through my eyelids.
To not feel...
Looking up.
It's a long drift away.
aren't as scary as ones that show nothing.
I looked to the opposite side
of the world,
blazing my mind's vision downward.
To feel...
Quick closing. Hope that my thoughts
wouldn't cut filthy circles
through my eyelids.
To not feel...
Looking up.
It's a long drift away.
Published 30th Dec 2011
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splendid first two lines.
formatting with narrative titles is chancy, but you made it work.
like the circles thru eyelids.
maybe change 'blazing' to another less-used word.
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formatting with narrative titles is chancy, but you made it work.
like the circles thru eyelids.
maybe change 'blazing' to another less-used word.
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