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[2019] Tired
A Moment's peace ends;
everything grinds to screeching halt
with another unanticipated flat tire
throwing another monkey wrench
into yet another day leaving you
reeling on the roadside, wheeling
and dealing with it in real time;
wind not up to the adventure
of billowing in your sails
sight-seeing balloon
gone to lead, grounded
and all you have to lean on
is the threadbare spare
already worn from so many
miles you don't care to recall
where it's been
but you take care of business
---find a way to get the show
on the road again
because thoughts of stepping
out into traffic solve nothing
while Life continues passing by;
God forbid it slows down for you
as the next round of appointments
inked onto calendar you've missed
restlessly taps their watches . . .
Catching your breath
you stand; still
falling further behind
getting with the program
and up to speed
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Re. Tired
23rd Dec 2019 9:16pm
I've never seen anyone rise to the task stronger than yourself. Being underappreciated by some certainly exacerbates any situation we face.
Is the repetition of another in the first stanza intentional for emphasis?
Is the repetition of another in the first stanza intentional for emphasis?
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Re: Re. Tired
23rd Dec 2019 9:20pm
Thank you. xo
Sometimes being an emotional creature is taxing and familiar triggers still suck the life right out of me.
Yes, intentional. Sort of like saying, "I've been down this road before."
Sometimes being an emotional creature is taxing and familiar triggers still suck the life right out of me.
Yes, intentional. Sort of like saying, "I've been down this road before."
Re: Re. Tired
23rd Dec 2019 9:24pm
I thought so. This is an example of how repetition works perfectly.
It's difficult when you're under demands from others who don't appreciate efforts. We've all been there, and thank goodness for the people who do appreciate you.
It's difficult when you're under demands from others who don't appreciate efforts. We've all been there, and thank goodness for the people who do appreciate you.
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Re. Tired
24th Dec 2019 4:38am
Dear JB,
Ugh! Cars. A necessary evil. Give me a horse any day. Totally get not feeling up to dealing with the crap some days produce. Sometimes it is just so exhausting. But, a new day dawns and we do it all over again. I’m still trying to figure out why however, I’m feeling this write at the moment and really appreciate its authenticity.
Aside from this or maybe in conjunction with, I wish you a Merry Christmas! H🌷
Ugh! Cars. A necessary evil. Give me a horse any day. Totally get not feeling up to dealing with the crap some days produce. Sometimes it is just so exhausting. But, a new day dawns and we do it all over again. I’m still trying to figure out why however, I’m feeling this write at the moment and really appreciate its authenticity.
Aside from this or maybe in conjunction with, I wish you a Merry Christmas! H🌷
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24th Dec 2019 11:00am
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Gifted? Well, thank you for the affirmation.
Things be so fucked that i have trouble 'feeling' my gifts these days.
Probably should say I be so fucked up.....(all my own doing), I certainly i-dentify wit the gist of this poem ("Tired")
Appreciate your & Aha's friendship, despite the cyberness of it all.
Things be so fucked that i have trouble 'feeling' my gifts these days.
Probably should say I be so fucked up.....(all my own doing), I certainly i-dentify wit the gist of this poem ("Tired")
Appreciate your & Aha's friendship, despite the cyberness of it all.
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Re: Re. Tired
25th Dec 2019 1:22pm
Wow. That's very generous of you to say, Didi3d.
Merry Christmas to you and yours! 🎄🎁❄
Merry Christmas to you and yours! 🎄🎁❄
Re. Tired
28th Dec 2019 11:04pm
With the sudden obstacles we can face at a moment's turn, there's the underlying optimism with the "but you take care of business" line. The resolve to keep going is what defines us.
Hope you're enjoying the holidays.
Hope you're enjoying the holidays.
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Re: Re. Tired
29th Dec 2019 00:10am
Thank you, Wally. I actually enjoyed chucking the Christmas tree out the back door and reclaiming walking space in my living room!
Re. Tired
7th Jan 2020 6:24am
Man's Odyssey is never ending. The blend between the literal fix of the metaphor and the contemplative reflection is a savvy technique, blurring uses of the vernacular tool, thus playing wholly original chambers for the reader. Normally the self awareness of any metaphor being too apt comes off as self indulgent, but your work is from substance over style, the excess of love, anguish, whatever runs off past the end of the day.
Ice cubes melting in the drink. Smooth when weary
Ice cubes melting in the drink. Smooth when weary
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Re: Re. Tired
7th Jan 2020 9:37am
Thank you, Loki. That was quite the summation. I'm an odd duck on an odyssey to create poetry anyone can enjoy and relate to.
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