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Walk With Me
( a tricube poem )
nothing guaranteed yet
I’m only human;
a defiant heart
love and art
walking night’s edge,
no telling apart
my words unconfined,
stars raining down
kissing this shoreline
nothing guaranteed yet
I’m only human;
a defiant heart
love and art
walking night’s edge,
no telling apart
my words unconfined,
stars raining down
kissing this shoreline
Written by
Jade-Pandora
(jade tiger)
Published 13th Dec 2019
| Edited 16th Dec 2019
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Re. Walk With Me
13th Dec 2019 11:58am
I love this, I don't comment often but this is one of my favorites that you've created...
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A gracious thank you, Jadie. I’m humbled that a man of few words has honored me, and it’s meaningful to me.
Re. Walk With Me
13th Dec 2019 12:01pm
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13th Dec 2019 2:35pm
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15th Dec 2019 12:36pm
Re. Walk With Me
Anonymous
13th Dec 2019 12:03pm
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13th Dec 2019 1:07pm
I didn’t think of it having that connection, but you’re right, ma fille....
It’s one of those manifestations that fits right in! So now, it’s in yours as well,
And thank you for stopping by to ‘walk with me’.
🐾X
It’s one of those manifestations that fits right in! So now, it’s in yours as well,
And thank you for stopping by to ‘walk with me’.
🐾X
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13th Dec 2019 1:54pm
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13th Dec 2019 6:41pm
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Aawww... gosh...
*hugs you from behind and buries her face in your hair...* xo
*hugs you from behind and buries her face in your hair...* xo
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14th Dec 2019 00:59am
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14th Dec 2019 11:13am
Anonymous
- Edited 4th Jun 2022 2:45am
15th Dec 2019 6:27pm
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Re: Re. Walk With Me
It’s good to have you stop by, my friend, and I thank you for your thoughts on our walk together.
Your suggestion is valid, and was an issue with me as well when I published. I have now made an edit I feel is closer to the desired results. The only thing I /can’t/ do is to take a word out completely. The reason being:
I’ve written a Tricube poem, which has the following structure:
—3 words per line
—3 lines per stanza
—3 stanzas per poem
Meantime, everything you’ve brought up is very much appreciated by me, & the RL honor.
with all my best,
ever
Jade🐾
Your suggestion is valid, and was an issue with me as well when I published. I have now made an edit I feel is closer to the desired results. The only thing I /can’t/ do is to take a word out completely. The reason being:
I’ve written a Tricube poem, which has the following structure:
—3 words per line
—3 lines per stanza
—3 stanzas per poem
Meantime, everything you’ve brought up is very much appreciated by me, & the RL honor.
with all my best,
ever
Jade🐾
Anonymous
- Edited 4th Jun 2022 2:45am
16th Dec 2019 5:35pm
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Re: Re. Walk With Me
16th Dec 2019 5:46pm
Thank you, Ethan... I think ‘yet’ works better, too.
And please believe me, you have nothing to apologize for. Especially to me.
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And please believe me, you have nothing to apologize for. Especially to me.
🐾
Re. Walk With Me
17th Dec 2019 6:09pm
Dear JP,
Very cool! I so enjoy learning about all the various types of poetry through your work.
This piece was interesting to me in that I envisioned three different vignettes of a play or tv show. I, of course, had the starring role in all of them, but...it was fun to create how the lines played out which funny enough didn’t take much because your carefully chosen words created such background and storyline, I had a fun time. Excellent write as per! H🌷
Very cool! I so enjoy learning about all the various types of poetry through your work.
This piece was interesting to me in that I envisioned three different vignettes of a play or tv show. I, of course, had the starring role in all of them, but...it was fun to create how the lines played out which funny enough didn’t take much because your carefully chosen words created such background and storyline, I had a fun time. Excellent write as per! H🌷
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Ahh thank you, dear sister, for explaining/ describing the way this piece inspired your visions.
I’m astounded when I’m reminded how a poet affects the readers on so many levels. It’s a joy I’ll never become jaded over. It’s revelations I celebrate!
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I’m astounded when I’m reminded how a poet affects the readers on so many levels. It’s a joy I’ll never become jaded over. It’s revelations I celebrate!
🐾💌